this joint was on point, very effective flow, structure was aight, rhyme scheme was damn consistant, multis were descent, it just all came together nice. lacked similes but made up for it with some descent metaphors, wat I most liked was the overall vibe of it, just hit nice all around, stay up and ...

"tryna back up shit improbable, knowing all that shit's impossible
when everythings inaudible the world dawns on the dishonorable
look at how they view us on the tv screen J said it best
if only I could edit stress, change the world and deaden threats"
^fuck ya, i was feeling that stretch right ...

this was verrrry mediocre, needs work in alot of areas. nice read none the less though. 1

"Of The Devil Ready And Formed So Steady Engorged
The Soul of Each And Every Person That Led Me Off Course
That Strolled Into The Shadows And Abandoned Me There
Stranded And Scared I Perseveered So Badly Impaired
For This Cruel World With No Sagacity For This Simpleton
I Stood With Them Took A ...

This drop was pretty straight, I liked the flow and the scheme u used at the end.

"i'm A Veteran Pick Pocket With A Quick Ratchet That'll Spit Sockets
But There's No Need To Switch Topics My T-Macs Known To Dish Rockets"

^I hate to re-quote but that was also my favorite line. 1

<t>I'm getting Older so I Might Change My Ways<br/>
Ain't On My Scale Of Maturity,The Stains a Phase<br/>
Map Out His Blueprints Make his Brain a Maze <br/>
Who Do you Lame's Amaze? Give Every Lame a Blaze<br/>
I Shoot down Topics you cats is Ashamed ta Graze<br/>
Always Stringing the Purp like ...

thanks y'all, feed much appreciated, I'll try and return the favor to all. and as far as the one part goes you gotta search a little harder for the word play. diss-trot is distraught, I thought it was clearer but I guess it's kinda iffy. and the other one prince that pull is pretty forced but ...

Random free I keyed up, had the urge to drop so ish, if y'all don't catch anything let me know and I'll fill ya in, should be self-explanatory though...enjoy!

Heads act like they on my shoulders claimin' to know wats inside my hood,
Probly cuz I drive you bitches crazy and I ain't even using Tiger ...

thanks for the feed, ne other thoughts

-- Sun Feb 28, 2010 5:12 pm --

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this drop was pretty hot, both y'all did ya thing, although I must say I was feeling complexity's part more than hazards, the metas seemed stronger and I rocked with the flow better. Don't sell yaself short though hazard, your part was on point as well. Just not as effective as plex's IMO. Please ...

this was pretty consistant with similes and metaphors which is straight. Rhyme scheme is deadly, you held down the scheme for quite a while in each stanza, pretty impressive actually. Multis on point for the most part, overall this piece is pretty good. what it needs is a good old fashioned polish ...

i'm down for watever playa, holla at me bout it ne time

I press forward to oblige constant regret, a call never swept...
Broom determination to answer injustice, what was I thinking?
A kiss never kept, lips never met just indifference of thoughts composed,
Lost yet chosen morality, conflicts engauge in a senseless wonder,
Bliss is thunder as ignorance ...

was feeling this for the most part, some areas need work, I mean, I'm not gonna say this was amazing or mind boggling, it was pretty solid though...

"My mission's statement's evident, a penchant for settin' precedents,
glitchin' aint my residence so my wisdom's the best in print.
My sentences ...

I composed this quite a while ago, found it and thought I'd share it with y'all...hope you enjoy!!!

(Political Smirks)
Cunt-tree of viscious ploy Bush in the breeze whistles blood for oil,
War-fare? Is war fair as innocent fall burried turning mud to soil?
An endless slope of ignorance pushes ...