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Random free I keyed up, had the urge to drop so ish, if y'all don't catch anything let me know and I'll fill ya in, should be self-explanatory though...enjoy!

Heads act like they on my shoulders claimin' to know wats inside my hood,
Probly cuz I drive you bitches crazy and I ain't even using Tiger's wood.
So y'all retalliate with crazy antics and you "ants" kinda "tick" me off,
But recognize no matter how hard ya ride my dick you'll never get me soft.
I'm like royalty takin' u to skool, u kneel and be the prince that pull me off,
I tell it like it is and quick to run, no wonder cats think ya so diss-trot.
Flex is known to have it all so it's best you fold ya cards,
I'll leave ya fuckin' ass punch drunk like my fists an open bar.
Then again ya might get repped if you patrol and show ya scars,
But mirrors don't lie, they show the truth, and you b'low the par.

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Heads act like they on my shoulders claimin' to know wats inside my hood,
Probly cuz I drive you bitches crazy and I ain't even using Tiger's wood.

Braaah .. Liking the heads shit .. good Follow up Line as Well.


So y'all retalliate with crazy antics and you "ants" kinda "tick" me off,
But recognize no matter how hard ya ride my dick you'll never get me soft.

LOL .. word


I'm like royalty takin' u to skool, u kneel and be the prince that pull me off,
I tell it like it is and quick to run, no wonder cats think ya so diss-trot.

No.


Flex is known to have it all so it's best you fold ya cards,
I'll leave ya fuckin' ass punch drunk like my fists an open bar.

aiight


Then again ya might get repped if you patrol and show ya scars,
But mirrors don't lie, they show the truth, and you b'low the par.

aiight.


First 2 Lines were nice yo. this was a P retty cool Drop.

Like to see more .. Stay Up N Keep Dropping
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This was purdy dope for a key
I don't know if I'm feelin' the Tiger Woods joints tho'
it's gettin' played out far as I'm concerned
ehhhhh dope nonetheless word play n meta's kept this alive!!
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Heads act like they on my shoulders claimin' to know wats inside my hood,
Probly cuz I drive you bitches crazy and I ain't even using Tiger's wood.
*golf clap* That's a well done sleight against Mr. Woods.
So y'all retalliate with crazy antics and you "ants" kinda "tick" me off
Niiiice.
But recognize no matter how hard ya ride my dick you'll never get me soft.
Awwwww, sick line lmao
I'm like royalty takin' u to skool, u kneel and be the prince that pull me off,
I tell it like it is and quick to run, no wonder cats think ya so diss-trot.
Didn't care for this. I couldn't find any correlation between any of the lines.
Flex is known to have it all so it's best you fold ya cards,
I'll leave ya fuckin' ass punch drunk like my fists an open bar.
Niice, moreso the second line though. Very nice though.
Then again ya might get repped if you patrol and show ya scars,
But mirrors don't lie, they show the truth, and you b'low the par.
Nice way to end it with a little bit of continuity from the earlier tiger woods line
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thanks y'all, feed much appreciated, I'll try and return the favor to all. and as far as the one part goes you gotta search a little harder for the word play. diss-trot is distraught, I thought it was clearer but I guess it's kinda iffy. and the other one prince that pull is pretty forced but watever, it was intended to be reference to principal coicidind with the skooling part and the rest should just be obvious. anyway, glad y'all enjoyed it for the most part. 1
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this started so well but that 3rd bar i think yes didnt fit in with the rest it had a nice flow and some dope punches but that bar just took it down quite alot i'm afraid nice key though keep doin what you do
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As far as Tiger puns are concerned, this was a pretty decent one:
"Heads act like they on my shoulders claimin' to know wats inside my hood,
Probly cuz I drive you bitches crazy and I ain't even using Tiger's wood."
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