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Haz
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One time

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I'm getting Older so I Might Change My Ways
Ain't On My Scale Of Maturity,The Stains a Phase
Map Out His Blueprints Make his Brain a Maze
Who Do you Lame's Amaze? Give Every Lame a Blaze
I Shoot down Topics you cats is Ashamed ta Graze
Always Stringing the Purp like Chains of Haze
Why The Turmoil? No Agitation Plus I Never Slip
Flying Firm Soil With a Better Grip its Sad ya Hating
Leather flip, Snake skin Snake Spin Fake Fin,Not S-V-U
Fishy sissy walking around like his testes grew
Family man's a loner washed Up stoner,blood Donner
slut boner, Mud toner drugged Ph-oner, have um Tapping out
Fuck what your Asking Bout, Welcome To My Passion Route
Laughing Out, At a whole lot Of Poles on Deck like Cashing trout
You pals is Lice Might as While Be a Canal in Sight,40 Caling Mice
chasing Aladdin Hype, Middle East Rapping Like a Lil Beast gives um Bragging right,
you Bragging right? Thats Cause U Cheat, Retreat the J Low like Brad in Flight,
With Material Like That I'd Imagine u Bragging Plad is Tight
you claim the Arab dummie sucks with Structure,
What goes down must come up that Arab Moneys still Something busta
Notice you go to a New Height with Conning, Me when i just M'C
And i'm no Type Of Common, it's crazy To even see the Shit I Said At My Spree,
Turnd Into a Mirror i'm In front it came Back at Me
Tryna Leave Me in a Sizzled Scene
Now the clubs really Jumping Do-E Malcolm in the middle Genes,
ain't chained to the rest like these ice Sickle fiends
pulling that Shit you'll never Stand grown like a crippled teen,
Negativity'll hold ya Down on this Triple Beam,
Gymnastics turn Into Thin plastic, see Through flips,
everyone want's to Just Talk at he Who Spits,
Cause i Made Mistake's Of taking Bait plus Taking Hate
till they're minds compared fine with a aching state,
Their Free train of Thoughts r Mason Fake, shaping Fate
shouldn't be checked Out as Shaking Mate,Case This rates
low as Hell Know This well once is good No Show then tell
One time's a Must, a Lyrical Sweep No PCP Or Signs Of Dust
Hater please just Grip ya Health, heart attacks ya neighbor
Lays calories The chips is Dealt, My race gets u So Mad U grip a belt
here take the Towel off my head put it 2 use Since u probably Shit yaself
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Re: One time

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This sucked more than normal ... but at least you finally admited your resemblance to Aladain!!


bwuahahahaha now ... FLY AWAY FAGGOT!!!
Real Recognize Real ... who dah Fuck is you???

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Re: One time

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i take it u two got something going on lol.... i thoguht it had a couple descent lines...and it all flowed well.. i would just like to see all this script put into spit... well ok... battle it out fellas?
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Re: One time

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slut boner, Mud toner drugged Ph-oner, have um Tapping out
Fuck what your Asking Bout, Welcome To My Passion Route
Laughing Out, At a whole lot Of Poles on Deck like Cashing trout
You pals is Lice Might as While Be a Canal in Sight,40 Caling Mice
chasing Aladdin Hype, Middle East Rapping Like a Lil Beast gives um Bragging right

^^^^^^^^^^^that did flow together decently!
I'm diggin' it, you always coming with these type of pieces
which is good, shows consistency
keep doin' you.....oh....


and D^^^^^^don't get them started
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Re: One time

Post by Phasewon »

This shit was straight, it had a more poetic/spoken word
Vibe to it as opposed to lyrical rap shit, which is cool,
Not really my steez but nonetheless your structure and flow
Was up to par, generally simple and somewhat forced multi
usage, you have on point structure and flow, I'd just
search a little harder for those rhymes, but decent shit, stay at it.
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Re: One time

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i love this piece haz the rhymes in the begining with the multies n shit were hot as hell it was a dope piece all over in my eyes maybe not upto other standards but i thought this was the shit ashame it went a lil bit downhill at the end but still was quite strong mayne the first half you just ripped up the page i mean hella dope much love for this piece keep it comin
The Eagerness Is Putrid My Fluids Acid Leaves You Vexed Like Black Holes
Your Inept To Correct Stretched Like Fat Folds Perplexed Like Castro
I'm So Tenacious With Rhymes Sensatious So Patient With Lines
While You Fill Your Writtens With Filler And So Stay Vacant In Mind
I'm Amiable But Too Your Haters I Appease Your Arcane Admissions
Dark Games No Vision Your Avarice Lead To Scarred Shamed Partitions
So Callous In His Candor You Have To Coerce For Neglect
For Worse Or For Best I'm Confidant With A Verse Of Respect

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Re: One time

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I'm getting Older so I Might Change My Ways
Ain't On My Scale Of Maturity,The Stains a Phase
Map Out His Blueprints Make his Brain a Maze
Who Do you Lame's Amaze? Give Every Lame a Blaze
I Shoot down Topics you cats is Ashamed ta Graze
Always Stringing the Purp like Chains of Haze
^meh, nothing spectacular here.

Why The Turmoil? No Agitation Plus I Never Slip
Flying Firm Soil With a Better Grip its Sad ya Hating
Leather flip, Snake skin Snake Spin Fake Fin,Not S-V-U
Fishy sissy walking around like his testes grew
Family man's a loner washed Up stoner,blood Donner
slut boner, Mud toner drugged Ph-oner, have um Tapping out
Fuck what your Asking Bout, Welcome To My Passion Route
Laughing Out, At a whole lot Of Poles on Deck like Cashing trout
^this whole stretch is fucked, seriously, no offense if ur being serious but I'm assuming by this point this is some kinda spoof drop.

You pals is Lice Might as While Be a Canal in Sight,40 Caling Mice
chasing Aladdin Hype, Middle East Rapping Like a Lil Beast gives um Bragging right,
you Bragging right? Thats Cause U Cheat, Retreat the J Low like Brad in Flight,
With Material Like That I'd Imagine u Bragging Plad is Tight
^........this part wasn't all that bad, i like the retreat line.

you claim the Arab dummie sucks with Structure,
What goes down must come up that Arab Moneys still Something busta
^ok then, lol, not really feeling that bar.

Notice you go to a New Height with Conning, Me when i just M'C
And i'm no Type Of Common, it's crazy To even see the Shit I Said At My Spree,
Turnd Into a Mirror i'm In front it came Back at Me
Tryna Leave Me in a Sizzled Scene
Now the clubs really Jumping Do-E Malcolm in the middle Genes,
ain't chained to the rest like these ice Sickle fiends
pulling that Shit you'll never Stand grown like a crippled teen,
Negativity'll hold ya Down on this Triple Beam,
^this stretch actually hit not too bad I'd say.

Gymnastics turn Into Thin plastic, see Through flips,
everyone want's to Just Talk at he Who Spits,
Cause i Made Mistake's Of taking Bait plus Taking Hate
till they're minds compared fine with a aching state,
Their Free train of Thoughts r Mason Fake, shaping Fate
shouldn't be checked Out as Shaking Mate,Case This rates
^not feeling this.

low as Hell Know This well once is good No Show then tell
One time's a Must, a Lyrical Sweep No PCP Or Signs Of Dust
Hater please just Grip ya Health, heart attacks ya neighbor
Lays calories The chips is Dealt, My race gets u So Mad U grip a belt
here take the Towel off my head put it 2 use Since u probably Shit yaself
^not really feeling this last part too much neither.

Overall this entire drop was so-so. There was a few lines that were up to par and even one I really liked, but for the most part I didn't find it to be that amazing. Just my opinion. Stay up and keep doing you. 1
Last edited by ReFleXiOn on Mon Apr 12, 2010 6:52 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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