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damm i liked this piece shoulda been longer but had a dope flow to it very nice bars i liked readin this didnt think i was gonna nothin against you just cant be assed feeding at the moment but when i read this i was like ohh mayne this is pretty dope my favourite bar was

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that shit was dope all of it and with a strong finish very nice piece here i applaud this
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i'm A Veteran Pick Pocket With A Quick Ratchet That'll Spit Sockets
But There's No Need To Switch Topics My T-Macs Known To Dish Rockets

Dope punch. Feelin' the multies.
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This drop was pretty straight, I liked the flow and the scheme u used at the end.

"i'm A Veteran Pick Pocket With A Quick Ratchet That'll Spit Sockets
But There's No Need To Switch Topics My T-Macs Known To Dish Rockets"

^I hate to re-quote but that was also my favorite line. 1
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haha, I like your sports metaphores.. I gotta join the mass on this line "i'm A Veteran Pick Pocket With A Quick Ratchet That'll Spit Sockets
But There's No Need To Switch Topics My T-Macs Known To Dish Rockets" LOL, that's just a hellova bar there Toyh.
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Re: Just A Key

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Solid wording, and good punchlines. The last two bars were clearly the stand outs.

Not much more to say about it.

Enjoyable read though.
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Re: Just A Key

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this whole piece went together fluently
got some dope bars in here, punches were on point
and the flow was nice...well until I got to this part

Turn Bill Cosby When My Shots Hit They'll Turn You into A Jellitan Suite

you threw me off I was like jellitan SUITE?
but I get it it was supposed to be SUIT...other than that a dope piece!
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Re: Just A Key

Post by HKX »

not bad 4 a short drop dawg word play is dope as always punchlines were on point 4 a quick lil key dis is ill man

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opener was ill if u got a sick opener then ur straight
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Re: Just A Key

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All Of You Cats Foolish That's Why i'll Never Make Ammends With Man
i Drop Bars So Heavy They'll Snap Bones 'Til All Of Your Tendons Jam
I think i heard something similar to that..but given its a key.. still nicely put together

but the last two bars were hot... since everyone quoted it no need to...and that bill cosby line was hot too... thanks for droppin...helps a dude out
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