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Lord Willin'

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Lord willin' we grow from dreams of crack dealin'
gat peelin', rain drippin' from momma's crack'd ceilin'
insane livin', went from lane switchin', peelin'
now we appealin' to lame's wishin' they made millions
raised chil-ren abused by faulty parents left to grow
no father, mother goin' thru her own tragic episodes
a steppin' stone of life, a hectic flow to strife
now the message is so defined, a septic flow on ice
tryna back up shit improbable, knowing all that shit's impossible
when everythings inaudible the world dawns on the dishonorable
look at how they view us on the tv screen J said it best
if only I could edit stress, change the world and deaden threats
realizing that head is best...kept secret, now let's invest
there's so much more we could bring to the table I sense it
but my senses is so lost in the dark, I forget the waters I tested

you know....

they say stay paid, work 9 to 5's and hopefully life progresses
but at the end of the day....I don't think I want to see it.....lights please








I done fucked up at the end......always happens tho'
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Solid verse, I don't think you fell off at the end,
Shit was consistent all the way through, one or two
Forced multi shits here and there if I had to nit pick,
But you managed to stay lyrical and flow on point while
At the same time delivering relevant lines with a message
Behind 'em, good shit.
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tryna back up shit improbable, knowing all that shit's impossible
when everythings inaudible the world dawns on the dishonorable
fav line

i liked the verse. it gave me afeeling of a dark realization.
it dont gotta be summer for me to come up north with da birds~Murda for bricks
or Murda by numbers WHEN i Point the 1-2 gauges tre' or fo-five at ya six
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Lord willin' we grow from dreams of crack dealin'
gat peelin', rain drippin' from momma's crack'd ceilin'


Damn that shit right there hits.... the flow thru out is fire... just too bad its a small verse... nice shit... readin this give me ideas on how to elevate...ups
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"tryna back up shit improbable, knowing all that shit's impossible
when everythings inaudible the world dawns on the dishonorable
look at how they view us on the tv screen J said it best
if only I could edit stress, change the world and deaden threats"
^fuck ya, i was feeling that stretch right there, nicely put.

Overall very consistant piece, I def enjoyed the read, stay up and do you. 1
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Post by Riggz »

I liked it QZ:
"raised chil-ren abused by faulty parents left to grow
no father, mother goin' thru her own tragic episodes
a steppin' stone of life, a hectic flow to strife
now the message is so defined, a septic flow on ice"
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