Leave some constructive feedback and lmk what I need to improve

this beat is pretty sick... and I really liked your delivery and flo on that last verse ....

For some reason I find it hard to keep the same flo and chorus and just changing the lyrics ... but it seems like you did a pretty good job. i think the quality could be a little better ... but overall this was a pretty good.

Thanks man , I was inspired to write this cause of a friend whos going through this ... but good looks on the feedback

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-Ive been here for a month at this very same hospital
-Facing all the pain has remained as an obstacle
-Cancer's been the problem and I wonder if its solvable
-I heard somebody tell me that with you anything's possible
-And if its really true , do you think that you could help?
-Cause I doubt that I ...

I like how you kept the bars short and this also had a really nice flow to it ... overall I thought the whole piece was pretty dope , with a uniqye concept ... keep dropping man

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I agree with mOsArt ... this seems more like a poetic drop ... but yeah , this whole drop ended better than how it started ... keep dropping

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Thanks , I appreciate the feedback

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I know this is a short piece , but I havent posted in a while , cus i stopped writing , so i mite be a little rusty ... but leave me some feedback and tell me what you think
OH ... i left feed on "notions" and "my @mbitions"

-It really does hurt , to lose it all in a minute
-Love that we created ...

The flow in this piece is excellent ... this is probably one of my favorite drops ... I really have a way of letting out your emotions through your writin ... overall , this was dopeeee !

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Ohmy .. you just tore this guy apart... If you was to say this outloud in person , the delivery would be amazing lol ... but overall great drop , and i really liked some of the punchlines in there

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This had some pretty nice metaphors and it flowwed nicely ... you also had some good vocab like in the middle of your drop ... just one piece of advice , try not to rely on the one word punchlines so much .. But overall it was a decent dropp .

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I really liked the multis in this piece ... the flow was also niceee... cant wait to liaten to this on audio

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This little story flowwed pretty good , yet it seemed kind of simple ... yu shuld try using some challengin vocab , nd get more creative , maybe throw in a couple of metaphors ... but overall this was a good drop .

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You had a nice couple of multis throught the whole piece ... and the vocab wasnt hald bad either , the flow seemed kinda forced sometimes , but maybe its just how I read it ... overall good drop .

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