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sick n tired

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I'm sick and tired of this bullshit, nobody hires, they only fire,
Fucking liars, feel I'm finna fix their fucking faces under my tires,/

I'm tired of living insane, watching the world walk by my window pane,
And if I signal pain the people could give two shits, I guess its all the same,/

For the rest, just don't expect change from me except on my death bed,
Till that day I'll see red 'cause the anger inside my head is fed up to its extent, /

I'm gonna be a sick fuck at other peoples expense with no regrets,
So if I offend you then fuck you, I love when you pass me by with resent, /

There's no time like the present for me to dwell on the past,
At last I learned love lost is just the cost to be the man causing casts, /

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You had a nice couple of multis throught the whole piece ... and the vocab wasnt hald bad either , the flow seemed kinda forced sometimes , but maybe its just how I read it ... overall good drop .

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Good looks...ill work on it

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The flow and imagery could use some work but besides that this shit was dope

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Post by Defiance »

good shit man it did flow, feeling your struggle searching for work sucks balls
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