good lookin out haz...
bumped
double bumped

ok i wasnt intending on dropping this here but then i read symbolikulls long ass sick shit and thought fuck it why not.

all feedback appreciated and will be returned.1.

Fuck the critics and the cops they wanna see me on my knees/
wanna see me cut, kicked in the dirt n bleed/
watch me as i freeze ...

nice drop bro, lyricaly and content wise this was very good.

as a read i wasnt really feelin it too much but it might sound better on audio tho.

content wise im not really a fan of these types of drops but thats just personal preference.
work on your lyrics a bit dude cos some of its too repetitive and a lil played out.

keep droppin n elevating.1.

the structure in this piece was a lot better than previous drops . lyrically you was pretty on point. keep em coming.1.

wow that was real sick.........

vocab was off the chain, flow was on point, technicslly this was some ill shit. content wise it was cool, bit of filler here and there but that aint even worth goin on about cos overall this was one of the best pieces i seen on here.
definitely wanna see more bro.1.

good looking out phase and novel....yeah its nothin spectacular just something i keyed up bored..........1.

lol as opposed to you?
or just in general?

lol fag........

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/recent-verse-vt13056.html

Its that damn man of letters but no teller of tales/
dancin man of death but here this fella prevails/
in the cellars of hell - i dwell here on my jack jones/
spittin all this grit n shit - filtered through my cracked tones/
snap bones of ...

good looks.

its an improvement on your previous drops.

your structure still needs work cos writin in that style makes it read like some ramblin shit which in turn devalues the drop.

lyrically you where better this time too, once you ease up on the filler material, you gonna be just fine.

but structure is ...

needed to vent haz? lol

nice drop, flow was cool structure was cool and some nice rhymeschemes too.

I'm Fake Or Wack Cus Haz Out Of C.T..just Stop Runnin ya Mouth Try N See Me...
We Got Artist's Sellin Out Before There Out Sellin C.D's...

^^ the opener was kinda played but i like the finisher a ...

Someone broke his spirit n he put on a cast,
Someone wrote his lyrics n he put on a mask,

^^^i like that right there.

nice flow throughtout the whole piece.
only thing was it had a few too many filler bars but otherwise this was cool.

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The knife in the kitchen, the strife withing living
but even the weapon cant change the life he's been giving
He's been a wreck, i've asked him if he feels bitter yet
he says nothing, shakes his head, and lights a Ciggarette

^^^favourite part.

nice flow/subject/structure.

longer next time tho.
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