new rhymes. comments please.

[TheBigHurt~]

You aint got shit nigga you got skin like a crocodile.
Im crocodile dun d bitch ill skin you while I twist the dial.
Turn you to boots while I blast my beats.
Ill lace you up and slide you on my feet,
head to your girls house, get between her sheets.
Ride her like a cowboy, yee haw.
I wanna fuck bitch,
open your mouth and take this nut bitch,
damn you got a sexy butt bitch.
Ha ha let me slap that thing while I tickle your clit.
You aint gotta be a toilet to know that I am the shit.
Pound it so hard I make your slit spit.
Hit it so deep, Im the reason that your chicky crossed the street.
I could make you a believe baby, bring you to the light.
Make you shine bright.
Everytime I make you nut youll say I changed your life.
You tell me to make you my wife.
All I say is that your pussys tight while I fuck you good,
eat you for breakfast, fuck you for lunch
and blow your brains tonight.
That’s how its gonna be bitch, aight.
Im wilder than deer meat, but my taste aint gamey.
White like vanilla ice cream, im sweet.
Im your favorite ladies favorite after dinner treat.
This aint like no other kinda white meat.
If you wanna get a mouthful you can holla at me,
Here take my card says lil pinchy.

[GrimBlaze]

as a read i wasnt really feelin it too much but it might sound better on audio tho.

content wise im not really a fan of these types of drops but thats just personal preference.
work on your lyrics a bit dude cos some of its too repetitive and a lil played out.

keep droppin n elevating.1.

[TheBigHurt~]

is there a forum for gangster rap?

[Haz]

Real Simple..

"Toilet-Shit" Play was just .. 2 Played..
2 Be Honest U Could Of Put a Better Verse Together
There's Potential...
I Wasn't Really Feeling The Lines Like That
"sexy Butt bitch" Blah Blah..
U Could Be Way More Creative..
Anyways KEep Droppin+