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Picture for the mind.

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Welcome round to my ends, the violence is spiralling/
reachin for the vicadin - mindset so tired 'n/
never get to sleep, creep streets in the deep mist/
reapers - seek this - script of my features/
leeches - feedin on the soul of my bloodstream/
must mean - perception of reality is just dreams/
trust me - i succeed, balance on this tightrope/
night woke n now we duck and cover here in blind hope/
its only on these pages i find peace to exist/
i cant weep man, im pissed, at this beast in our midst/
its reach for your clips - pull ya heat on this bitch/
swing free from this shit with my feet and my fists/
bearin teeth through my lips - pay in smiles for the drama/
karma - got me walkin miles for nirvana/
with heavy plated armour - as i pound on this dirt road/
search for - the seeds of the trees which my hurt sow.........

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Post by Haz »

Begginin Was Real Shakey...

I Mean This Was Cool
It Really DOesn't Compare To Your Other Drops Though
You Could Of Done So Much More With This Piece..
Next Time Just Come MOre Creative My Dood..
I've Seen Better From You.. So I Know U Can...

Anyway's Cool Read . Keep Droppin
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these two bars stand out in my opinion

leeches - feedin on the soul of my bloodstream/
must mean - perception of reality is just dreams/

bearin teeth through my lips - pay in smiles for the drama/
karma - got me walkin miles for nirvana/

keep writing fam, looking to see your next drop
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solid flow man for real liked it. i think u cudda opened it up a bit better but it doesnt ruin the content,keep droppin it was good
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this was a nice drop..IMO. i like
the imagery..and the flow was nice
mainly after the word features..
beginning wasn't as strong as the rest
but it was still good..IMO

keep droppin mayne...1
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good looks.
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