Hell On Earth

[GrimBlaze]

ok i wasnt intending on dropping this here but then i read symbolikulls long ass sick shit and thought fuck it why not.

all feedback appreciated and will be returned.1.

Fuck the critics and the cops they wanna see me on my knees/
wanna see me cut, kicked in the dirt n bleed/
watch me as i freeze and struggle to survive/
if livin is a pleasure why death occupies my mind?/
every night i cry cos my tears know no shame/
how do i maintain with pain in my frame/
needle in my veins - cloudy liquid circles round/
light surpasses sound and i wake up on the ground/
dazed and confused in this manic mindstate/
panic took my soul and scan it like a crime rate/
i put my trust in blind fate - if only for a second/
cos i know that danger lurks when gates of hell beckon/
life got us stressin yo - suckin on crackpipes/
knuckles bruised and shattered from my last fight/
i cast light on black nights onto my page/
my words spray between the lines and my rage is erased/
this is displayed - as my pen shoots its ink/
spark a cigarette sit back yo - n take time to think/
prison chains clink on polished wooden floors/
sunken eyes stare cold like lost metaphors/
for pain - what can i gain when my worlds destroyed/
automatic pilot my existance slashed void/
got my foot in the door - but its slowly closin/
if depression was a drug then i'd be overdosin/
a comatose king - bedridden from the battle/
no escape from flames when the gun fire rattles/
body stays shackled in a four by four cell/
he was born pure but this earth showed him hell/
he stood there and he watched as the clip slept with the gun/
gave birth to a bullet and they called it first son/
it grew into a hollow tip full of shit when lit/
funeral procession heard the shots n came quick/
this is it..
purgatory in the purest apparition/
dance with the devil got me locked in this position/
another composition from the recess of my brain/
quietly insane but if i seize it i'll sustain/
the prefix of the kane will be able to speak/
a prophet in the sun brings a saviour for the weak/
the sabre in the sheath stays hidden til its time/
punctured in the spine blazed riddle by the nine/
written in this rhyme is the conscience of mankind/
seek and you shall find is the answer to the signs/
weathered by the grime inocculated by the liquor/
heartbeat skippin quicker as i watch the candle flicker/
stop the hatred pick up smaller weapons for the call/
swingin in the hall but never reckoned with the fall/
letters on the wall - try to find a better place/
before the reaper throws his whole set up in my face/
i vanish with no trace - a thunder in the sky/
my spirit set to fly presents a wonder to the eye/
im goin under why?- was i crafted by the sickle/
my bones are going brittle as i capture just a little/
of the fickle issues - which - dominate our thoughts/
dont mistake my flaws i push my fate up through the doors/
aint got time to pause cos im runnin outta space/
my memoirs turnin black like the plague im losin grace/
like shotguns in they case im steady waitin for the drama/
searchin for the fathers of all this broken karma/
the consequence of armour dealin fate like poker chips/
the joker always tricks no matter if you broke or rich/
like a kid up in an orphanage im yearnin to belong/
ignore me when im right but they would burn me when im wrong/
i know im goin on but this expression from my mental/
n i wont ever stop while there still lead inside my pencil/
givin you this stencil call it blueprint if ya like/
lets just hope your right when the judges hammer strikes/
it'll take away your life leave you locked up in the heist/
intricate precise like when they crucified christ/
a second chance is never twice i hope you understand my words/
ever since my birth i been - weighed down by this curse/
vision of the hearse in my dreams of stolen sleep/
escapin from my demons as i duck their golden reach/
temptation as they breach - the safety of my dome/
whisper in my zone before i know it - packin chrome/
a chill rips through my bones - is someone walkin on my grave/
n if at night i pray is it true i could be saved?/
illusions of the brave its survival of the fittest/
born free, taxed to death gettin paid a pittance/
health on earths been sickened - adapt to the climate/
and let me unveil - my motion picture for the blinded/
rap shit got me tired i just cant stop chattin/
mentally im battlin when tempers start snappin/
i can hear it click clack n callin me to bust/
won over by the lust as i sense the blood rush/
i picture the concussed epic circus slaughter/
another mothers daughter cut wicked by a stalker/
im sorry if you think my vibe is kinda depressin/
but as long as issues pressin aint got time to be messin/
for the gifted its a blessin to be stable on they feet/
i spark a spliff - start to drift and finish this piece.........

[TheBigHurt~]

subject matter doesnt interest me, but some of the ryhmes are pretty cool

[Haz]

Most Of The Multi's Were On Point..
Substance Was Straight..
I Liked The Overdosin On Depression, Lost Metaphors.
Spark a Cig N Think...
It's just All Real shit.. In Some Spots U Got A Little Off Topic In My Opinion.. But To Be Honest i Like Your Written's..

illusions of the brave its survival of the fittest/
born free, taxed to death gettin paid a pittance/
health on earths been sickened - adapt to the climate/
and let me unveil - my motion picture for the blinded/

Dope...

You Could Tighten Up Some Multi's...
KEep Focus On One Broad Topic..
& Go From There...

But Other Then That This Was A Cool Drop..

Keep Droppin.

[GrimBlaze]

good lookin out haz...
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double bumped