it was alright this, not bad for a demo track like

yea this iz a hot song, nicely done

props

this is good work, it has gr8 visualisationz and intrigue, i think sometimes you were carrying on tho when u shoulda stopped and started something new


to the primordial brine, where serpents swim without spines
and spit a bar to the bog to give it something of mine


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yeah this was quite good, there was presence and skillz but it was exactly what ud expect in a 1st verse

i wqould reccomend working on increasing ya vocabulary and wordplay to really bring interest into a written punchline

this is what real muzikz for man, tha whole atmo & vocal presence is on fyre itz clean as fuk i cant fault it

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yea it reminded me abit of the blood diamond soundtrack at 1st glance, this iz kool i can see a rapper getn on this and flowin smooth str8 out

i think maybe it was missing a build up of drum presence and a bounce back into the quiet part makin the melody really sink in after , its nicely mastered ...

yeh, theres a million ways u could remix nething

and thx 4 posting tha links up in here

Im defintely guna b working to develop a bigger melody aspect and more originality in patterns too...

feelin it is what im all about preparing man and def a letdown in a lot of underground shit, that fukn mud ...

almost forgot, u can remix tha track if u like man

I hear yaz, this is all FL work, except the vocals, i appreciate ya time tho and ya criticismz too

sOME OF THIS IS ROUGH WORK, SOME NOT... QUITE A FEW TRACKZ SINCE MY LAST VISIT THO

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YEAH THIS IS FYRE MAN ORIGINAL VIBE, IF UR LOOKIN FOR CRITISISM ALL I CAN SAY IS WHEN IT FIRST POPPED OFF THEN THE WHOLE THING KICKZ IN THE MAIN LEAD WAS A BIT CONFLICTING, ID WORK ON MIXING THE MAIN LEAD TO SHINE BUT IN OTHER PARTS IT WAS FINE

ITS GOOD THO MAN I WOULDA FUKD THIS UP BACK IN THA DAY ...

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