yeh gotta be immortal technique

edited the 1st verse and an additional second verse probably guna re write it tho

prepare to be stripped-thick this faggot knows that this shit's-sick
u fucked like premature ejaculation cus i'm ending this bitch-quix/quick

no hard hitting at all

grab-at-the-wire i'll stab-at-the-fire how the hell can this maggot-get-higher
drag-at-this-lyer it's like i'm changing a wheel cus i ...

read it quickly its nice man i will give u a fullbreakdown wen i get 2 my mates fam
but its nice man

i sit here hot headed my mind bursts into flames
it feels all eyes are on me like the curtains bin raised
im on a circular stage, with a puposeful aim
the honest truth is that couldnt be further away
i guess im jus vermin decay like those urban estates
coz i aint learning today when im working the ...

plex that shit was deep fam really got me into the mood to read the whole thing

and boy am i glad

ruckus that shit was amazing, truelly bruv, i take my fitted off to you for that fam the whole thing almost felt real for a moment, from start to end it was brilliant

upping on votes guys
nice quix, about fucking time tho man lol

if were talkin the illest, dont compare me to this bitch
this battles a workout commercial and i 'swear you will get ripped'

nice i liked this line

you can only win by dickrydin' so let em go and check for you
common sense, any dudes who like 'men' are homosexual

bit forced but not bad

bring ...

i enjoyed the whole verse rigz u keep dropping better and better evrytime.
this would be awesome on audio, a duppy beat wud compliment this brilliantly keep it up mayne and the urine test line was phat, dope lines are played we all know but i gotta say bruh that was flipped excellently and i wudnt ...

Haha, watup Soul? All good, fam? Good to see someone I'm familiar with over here. Lookin' forward to see how ya battle on a site with structure.

Respect,
$aw

im looking forward to seeing you drop in our battle so the tourny doesnt flop, wtf man uv had nearly a week ffs, u that shook or can u ...

the first two u get mad props for second two were aight still last 1 was pretty dope i wasnt feeling 74 quite so much
all in all tho fam ur talented man keep em coming

cheers rig that the sort of feedback i need man much appreciated
jus so u know i was like 9-10 in 2000 lol

this was deep, the whole thing worked perfectly, no over complication tryin to force wordplay or multies, the flow was perfect the wordplay was nice too many good aspects ill be here all day writing about it lol

this is sick, the nozcema pads line was big

Another case for me 2 catch, cuz Imma take whats yours
Like Ma$e and DMX, I never break or feel stressed
So if death, true niggas go to war for me, Pour a 40 OZ
And get them suckas good before they taking more homies

i struggled with this bit couldnt get ...

thanks for all the feedback guys, especially for the breakdown j ima work on that section coz i was a bit sceptical of that section. thanks for the crit guys