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token jesture
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finding the answers

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i sit here hot headed my mind bursts into flames
it feels all eyes are on me like the curtains bin raised
im on a circular stage, with a puposeful aim
the honest truth is that couldnt be further away
i guess im jus vermin decay like those urban estates
coz i aint learning today when im working the grade
and im the perfect display of a certain mistake
thoughtless and insecure but i wasnt nurtured this way
so why am i hurting today, when im searching for grace
coz the devils decided on usurping my brain
im no longer a merciful breh, instead yearning for pain
keeping the heart cold prevents tears burning my face
i wanna further my fate, be honest, earning a wage
instead im the low life stealing ur purse in the rain
now i dont wana give birth to a race that i personally hate
should i end my own life so no longer the burden remains

hook (havent written yet)

will post verse 2 later can i get sum feed on this please
I drop more dope than fucking top shotters
call me korean meatballs coz im the dogs bollox
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The Gonz
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Post by The Gonz »

This shit was ill, man. The multies were great, the flow was very solid. Almost sounded like somethin I would write lol. Nice rhyme scheme, props for using it the whole time. Had some good imagery too. You're a nice addition to the talent on Illest, never hurts to get new cats with skills.
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Post by DaPrince »

This entire drop was fyre but this line in particular I liked a lot.
token jesture wrote: keeping the heart cold prevents tears burning my face
Can't wait to see the rest of it.
I don't drop rhymes all the time, but when I do, I prefer to spit fire
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the honest truth is that couldnt be further away
i guess im jus vermin decay like those urban estates
^^^^ I was feeling that
it's got a real truth to it
and really puts you in a different zone
keep writing my dude
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