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Ana's Victim.

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Ana's Victim.

Post by Stina »

OH SNAP ..this is OLDDDDD. i wrote it about 2 or 3 years ago, still one of my favorite writings though. Oh and "Ana" is short for Anorexia.

you'll never notice it
well at least not at first
its not a disease
its a disorder, a curse

people would tease - "she's so fat"
but now shes too thin
everytime her hunger grew
she controlled it

she ate once a while
but later threw it up
gums sore, mouth bled
she became less healthy then she was

her family was concerned
she only weighed seventy-nine
her doctor warned if she got to sixty
her body could shut down, she could die

she payed no mind
her parents forced her to eat
she began taking laxitives, water pills
she cried herself to sleep

her skeletal frame
her hair thinning, falling out
her skin turning gray
she lost control, then passed out

she lays now
underneath a heavy stone
she was starving for perfection
but she wasnt alone

many people dont understand
many others do
anorexia nervosa
has taken the lives of others too

you'll never notice it
well at least not at first
its not a disease
its a disorder, a curse
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Post by drunken jesus »

one of the most poetic pieces in this section, it was straight some of it was sloppy but overall it was pretty well put together

good job representing fat bitches
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Post by Spoof »

wow that was a very good poem! I loved it! so creepy and terrible.

she ate once a while
but later threw it up
gums sore, mouth bled
she became less healthy then she was

she payed no mind
her parents forced her to eat
she began taking laxitives, water pills
she cried herself to sleep
^^^^my fav parts of it

props!
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Post by SlickMex »

drunken jesus wrote:one of the most poetic pieces in this section, it was straight some of it was sloppy but overall it was pretty well put together

good job representing fat bitches
fat bitches LMAO..
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Post by Stina »

lol awl poor fat bitches ;/
thanks guyss :]
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Post by Viral »

ima have to agree wit DJ on this.....i thought the intro n outro was a pretty good idea for it.....being that its 2 or 3 years old...lol u were packin poem skills back then huh..hahhaa...u should keep at it for sure.....i demand another one!!..hahaha...
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Post by Lawgix »

this was some really good stuff stina... very well done... 8/10 congrats keep it up!
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Post by RH1NO »

i agree with th 8/10 maybe 8.5 solid great drop havent heard from you in a while you should drop more like this
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