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Stina
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A tad bit on the emo side..

Post by Stina »

just came out within a half an hour or so..

i wonder how life would be if different decisions were made
lieing under a fake exterior and my vision is going insane

sometimes i question my future, my past and my present
what would happen if i had succeeded in what i had intended?

what if one day I just lost it, stand before my line and cross it
would these devils release from hiding within my closet?

i wanna know.. who would mourn, who would rejoyce?
i'm screaming to this world, yet im silent with no voice

what if i dont leap when a train is headin my way?
instantly i'd decease, but that's only for cowards play

i sound a bit psychotic, but these thoughts cant be forgotten
my life so crazy and chaotic, i feel as if my mind is rottin
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Post by Spoof »

niiiiice I was feelin' the whole poem! very good drop!

yep as I said the whole poem was great but this bar was my fav:
what if one day I just lost it, stand before my line and cross it
would these devils release from hiding within my closet?
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Post by Viral »

this isnt as emo as u stated in the title...i was expecting...slit wrists n loneliness n pitty n bullshit!...lol

this was definatley a good piece...i liked it...alot...i could relate to some of the things u said.....i dont really like that train line...my friend took himself out by train...but other than that..it was dope...lol..keep it up...ur gettin better everytime i see u drop a piece
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

yeah that was a nice drop, semi short but had alot of emotion for what it was. I expected it to be more emo as well. I liked it all and to many lines that were dope for me to pick a favorite. Nice job Stina! Keep em comin
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