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Killin' Tha Multies.. Feed Plz.

Post by $hayne »

I Always Got Some Chips Illegally-Stackin',
Tearin' Emcee's Apart While Strategically-Rappin'.
Gimme A Mic And Ya Gaurenteed-To-Be-Clappin'.
And In My Battles There Needs-To-Be-Action.//
And You Know With Words-Imma-Fuckin'-Wizard,
Everything From Me Ya Heard-Gave-Ya-Tha-Shivers.//
I'm Fly Like A Bird, Plus Brave-Yall-Jus-Some-Quitters.
And Plus You're Way More Of An Amatuer-Spitter,
You Spit So Much Bullshit You Prolly Damage-Ya-Shitter.//
So Step-Bird, You'll Be The Cattle I'll Be The Sheperd
And Ya Girl? I Hit It From The Front And The Back-Too-Left-Her.
Cuz I Got More Mack-Than-Hue-To-Tha-Heffner.//
And What I Say? I Told You In The First-Place-I-Don't-Care-Yo,
Cuz Lyrically I'm More Dangerous Than A Worse-Case-Senerio.//
So Don't Get Mad-At-Me If I Ruin Ya Whole Flow Anatomy
With Words I Shatter-Thee, I'll Leave You Like A Dead Battery.//
And I Don't Lack-Skills, On This Site Imma Stack-Bills,
Like I Was Makin' Some Crack-Deals.//

Stack-Bills = The Money By Your Name.
Hue Heffner = Who Don't Know Who He Is ?

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Post by MesaR »

Nice I Liked This Alot Your First Half Was ill The Rest Was Good To Some Bars Flowed a Little Choppy But Naa Good Shit
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

Didnt really see you Killin any Multies in this, but it was an aight spit, hopefully keyed... Wasnt that impressive and didnt really hold my attention much. Id give this 6/10 jus cuz the title and lack of multies...
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by precise »

the problem is, first half was ok, and then, you got lazy, like most other emcees, like "k i did this part kinda good ill just slack for the rest" basically, lol i dont like to see that, when you write freaking BRING IT lol

overall, good for a first piece that ive seen from you
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Post by Stina »

great rhyme sceme.. i liked that shit a lot.
and i first i read that you didnt know who Hue Heffner was .. i was about to be like WHAHHHH?!

"Like I Was Makin' Some Crack-Deals.// "
..didnt like that last line as much though ..
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Post by drunken jesus »

not trying to be a dick or anything but you didn't really kill any multis, i write more complex than that every drop and i don't think to myself "DAMN YOOOZZ WTFUXORZ I"M KILLING DE MULTIZ"

the first 4 lines were good but you fell off after that, it was alright overall but it wasn't really saying much content wise
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Post by complexity »

Yah. You can't really base a rap on multis.

Its the content, multis make the content seem better and make
it more complex.

Killah helped me realize that a long time ago.
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Post by precise »

multies = icing on the cake

or if youd put icing on a pie itd be the icing on the pie, cause i like pie
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Post by drunken jesus »

pies are good without icing so if you're making a lyrical pie with icing you know what you're doing
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
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Post by precise »

hahaha ^^^ WORD!!!!!!!!
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Dyz Shyt is Aiight, Makez Enuff Senze To Me, Kepe Doin Ya Thang `1
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