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READ AND COMMENT BITCHES plz? <3

Post by LadySam »

http://illestlyrics.com/board/my-multi- ... t3752.html


i was actually saving this for the sams audio but it didnt work out how i wanted it to
soooooooo here it goess!
feedback bitches


Were so hot, these bois want to 'snap, crackle, and pop.'
The other females here don't no whether to rap, tackle or stop.
Hip hop, wants a taste of us, piss off, we ladies are danger-us
Got cute nails, right style, slamin hair,
Just to tease these boys and give them girls something to stare.
Beware, we'll give u a scare, like a couple a kids playing
Truth or dare.
Sams the name, triple the game, triple the fame
Lady, fiasco, blitz, now theres something to make u skitz.
We'll tear you to bits, scare you to ur wits, shiver till you
Hit the pit, and then make you plead the fifth.

Hit the pit = hit peaking point
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Post by Momeijah »

Were so hot, these bois want to 'snap, crackle, and pop.'
The other females here don't no whether to rap, tackle or stop.
Hip hop, wants a taste of us, piss off, we ladies are danger-us
^Fav Lines, Nice Multis n Some Cool Punches, Flowed Nice The Whole Way Thru And yes Do it On Audio it Sounds Good Lol Keep it Up
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Post by LadySam »

ty ty and maybe i will audio it haha
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Post by precise »

yea good call, i think itd fit nicely in an audio with the other sams

first bar was great your gettin into the multies now good job
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

the intro was definitely catchy with the multis, quite a unique style.. not something i'd prefer but definitely entertaining.. an audio would be nice too if it flows the way i imagine, overall it was nice
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Post by Viral »

ooooowwwheeeeeee...lol...nice verse...it was short...u had some pretty nice rhyme schemes goin on....keep it up...
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

SAM!! I am so proud of you!! HAWTNESS <3 good job shits hawt
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Post by |.R.SON.aLL.| »

Were so hot, these bois want to 'snap, crackle, and pop.'
The other females here don't no whether to rap, tackle or stop.

^^ .. Tha Multies Were Sick in This Bar yo` ..
i Liked This Piece ..
ya Style is Very Different From Everyone On This Board ..
U Should Began to Use More Punches ..
Develop Some Creativity ..
ya`Know ??..
Good Read Though ..
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.. it`s S.a.W Bitches ..
.. Niggas ain't Fuckin Wit Tha Team ..

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Post by LadySam »

ty relly and ty for the feedback everyone! i need more coz im greedy
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Post by Stina »

lovin on the top lines
"snap crackle an pop" vs "rap, tackle or stop"
^ thats hot right thurrr
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Post by LadySam »

ty ty
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Post by *.HarleQuin.* »

lol = )
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Post by Typeo »

You've already shown this to me, and you know my response.

You've got some fire, you just need to give it all at once. I love your verse here, keep it up. I want to hear more from you.
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Post by LadySam »

i did show u huh?i think i showed a few ppl
its a lil old lol but oh well
thanks for the feedbackkkkkkkkkk muthafuckers
more? ty <3 haha
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Post by Subsist »

yea its good though im not interesting in listening to lebos on mic.
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