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People change like time feel like a philosopher every time I rhyme/ The diamond in the rough waiting to get his shine/ Preaching like Mandela without a glass box haters throwing disses like mass rocks/ Haters saying it ain't my time like human clocks/ Rapping spiritual lyrics to my deathbed i'm addicted to this game like a methhead/ Feel the words Jesus said while breaking the bread/ Still contemplating words unsaid/ Screw this there's new land ready to tread/
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this was allright not that great, structure was fucked off
improve the structure improve the flow

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u fucking suck... stop faking the funk... punk bitch
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FlipSide wrote:u fucking suck... stop faking the funk... punk bitch
damn speak it like it is... don't hold back anything Flip!

three words for ya tho bro.... Center Of Elevation

http://www.illestlyrics.com/board/center-elevation.html
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