Free punches

Silverback · Post by **Silverback** » Sun Jun 22, 2008 11:44 am

[font=Arial]aint directed @ noone jus some free punches n workin on wordplay

These punches r `'nailin'` u but ya cuticles aint cuttin me
To stop me you dont have the `'Rite~Aid`' like Pharmaceutical~Companies!'`

Trump me? Doubtful, you couldnt beat my hand with ya lames or guns
My goons are like 2 `'black-jacks' sweepin the board like` Spades n Clubs!'`

Stop tryna be liked, Im one to fear though, like ya in chains n `'pad~locks`'
When we all know you chouldnt be a `'hero'` with a fake guitar n an `'X~BOX!`'

These cats crying about losses, when the mic doesnt fit~you~hand
You already spoke, the only thing sponsoring your raps is a '`Tissue~Brand'`!

You got your` 'poker face`' on, no budgin till your buried in soil,~ hush
Quiet, if you're the new King and Im shittin on you, I guess it's a `'Royal~Flush'`!

Consistency at a halt, keep droppin the same shit thinkin ur the best~alive
But your game doesnt change, u just spinnin around in circles like MC `'F-5`'

Also known as the truth, best to known to catch and '`halt~lies'`
In your wounds Ill put '`salt~ties'`, n I can exploded anytime like SA `'Fault~Lines'`[/font]

- Mutual - · Post by **- Mutual -** » Sun Jun 22, 2008 6:30 pm

ohh well the punches got better towards the end
dam nice punches right here

You got your` 'poker face`' on, no budgin till your buried in soil,~ hush
Quiet, if you're the new King and Im shittin on you, I guess it's a `'Royal~Flush'`!

my fave bit^
keep'em comin
and welcome to illest
stay active

Ambiguous Realm · Post by **Ambiguous Realm** » Sun Jun 22, 2008 9:50 pm

straight punches, the wordplay is definitely there

Arvincible · Post by **Arvincible** » Mon Jun 23, 2008 8:22 am

Welcome to illest..

this is decent man, the approach is new, the punch isnt heat, but the wordplay makes it above average bars

Im not really feelin the wordyness, and how the attack doesn't seem hardhitting enough. Its obvious ur punches are all about wordplay..though

Ur references to card games is weak though, ur either too vague on the punch or tried too hard to make it hit because it doesn't connect as hard as u want it too.

U said these were key'd up so im guessing u should put more time into ur writing if u wanna improve.

Kvarshilesheoi · Post by **Kvarshilesheoi** » Mon Jun 23, 2008 8:52 am

str8 home slice

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Tue Jun 24, 2008 2:20 pm

Dead Silence · Post by **Dead Silence** » Tue Jun 24, 2008 5:16 pm

good shit

1st bar seemed forced.
coz of its length but otherthan that grade A

Omega Bill · Post by **Omega Bill** » Sun Jan 04, 2009 8:05 pm

This dude spit fire.

Haz · Post by **Haz** » Tue Jan 06, 2009 4:07 am

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