grass stains

Arvincible · Post by **Arvincible** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 5:54 am

As you guys know, im doing things through the phone so the format is never going to be as neat as my old pieces, but hey, you guys wanted to see somthin new from me so i wrote to show some elevation, and i hope you guys can see it...

[font=Lucida Console]I hate-to-admit, my life lately-is-shit, almost make my way-to-the-slits,
I pray-to-just-quit cuz everything I love and live for just lays-in-some-ditch
I wish my life was easy and I can just get away-and-forget,
but my heart is racing but not for some play-from-a-bitch
I wasn't perfect ma and I thank you for even dealin-wit-me,
when I was weak, you were the shield-just-for-me
She was my life and the realest to me, u made meals-just-4-me,
and now I call God a hypocrit for stealin-my-queen
All the food you cooked and the dinners I'd request,
through thick n thin your love was always put to test,
but u showed ur always the best...
Taught me to walk, talk, and how to really impress,
u gave me warmth and pillows and all my clothes to dress,
you will never be loved any less...
All the lullabies-in-the-dark, chasin butterflies-at-the-park,
I wish I had-still, now the pain dropped on me like an anvil
My life at a stand-still, I remember u fed me food from ya hand-filled,
im in so much hurt now cuz u used to be my advil
Childish-it-seems, but even through the wildest-of-dreams
I never thought it wud be the way that God-would-end-it
I did not-accept it, what was thought-expected,
all rhe thoughts-rejected but i freeze now that all the shock's-connected

Now I Hope these Memories of the past-brings the very last-pains,
the very last drops of tears as if it were the last-rain
I can only save-these-years-u-left-me
As I kneel in the front of ur grave-wit-tears-so-empty,
my knees filled with grass-stains...

I wish u lived forever, no one else deserved-it-more,
if u had a grade in life u'd get the perfect-score,
I don't know what else-to-say...
All the "I love you's" I wish I heard-it-more,
im sorry for all of this, I guess my heart's just hurt-and-sore,
and in-self-dismay...
I wanted to let go but I felt my heart lie,
I wanted to jump off a building or a mountain-side
My hairs stood and I looked down-n-cried,
and I felt the ground go colder as they put u down-inside,
The skies turned gray and the sun disappeared,
all the thoughts in my mind was all in-a-smear,
gone is the bliss-u-provided As I fall in-this-fear,
I already miss-your-guidance, and as the smile you used to give me fades
...all i can really kiss-is-this-silence...

Now I Hope these Memories of the past-brings the very last-pains,
the very last drops of tears as if it were the last-rain
I can only save-these-years-u-left-me
As I kneel in the front of ur grave-wit-tears-so-empty,
my knees filled with grass-stains...

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- Mutual - · Post by **- Mutual -** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 6:13 am

man nice multies stayed on point and i liked this shit
9/10 good shit nice concept
Keep'em comin

I wish u lived forever, no one else deserved-it-more,
if u had a grade in life u'd get the perfect-score,
I don't know what else-to-say...
All the "I love you's" I wish I heard-it-more,
im sorry for all of this, I guess my heart's just hurt-and-sore

My Fave Bit^
man i really liked the flow sum good shit real elevation
but ya good anyway so keep'em comin

Arvincible · Post by **Arvincible** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 6:23 am

thanks man

uppin for more feed

Futures · Post by **Futures** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 6:27 am

multis on this were great, the hook was wow. Had some nice imagery to it, i just wish there was a little bit more imagery in the verses. Overall the emotion was good and it was a great piece. stay up and my condolences

Arvincible · Post by **Arvincible** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 6:44 am

thanks for the feed yo

uppin for more

ÐÛÇ£» · Post by **ÐÛÇ£»** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 7:09 am

Wow.. Nice Ass Drop By My Dood Arv...
Multis Was Definately On Point...Flow Was Definatly Good And Consistent Ya Executed The Concept..My Fav Drop By You.
My Fav Line

I hate-to-admit, my life lately-is-shit, almost make my way-to-the-slits,
I pray-to-just-quit cuz everything I love and live for just lays-in-some-ditch

Wow...

Arvincible · Post by **Arvincible** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 8:26 am

thanks duc3 much appreciated

uppin

Scip · Post by **Scip** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 1:10 pm

yea b for real nice multies, imagery was good, everything was nice bout this drop

keep em coming you sick with the scrips for real kid you are a good writer

Dead Silence · Post by **Dead Silence** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 2:20 pm

yoo wayyyy to long for me to be readin right now ill leave the proper feed u deserve later

|.R.SON.aLL.| · Post by **|.R.SON.aLL.|** » Mon Jun 09, 2008 3:47 pm

Damn This Shit Was Amazing Fam ..
Everythin Was On Point ..
You Couldn't Have Put it Better ..
It`s Hard Dealin Wit a Loss ..
But When You Use ya Outlet to Cope Wit it ..
It`s Some Of ya Best Shit Ever ..
This Mos Deffo is Writer Of Tha Year Status Fam ..
I Loved it ..
From Beginning to End ..

-TraMaTiK- · Post by **-TraMaTiK-** » Tue Jun 10, 2008 4:17 am

well rell took what i wuz gonna say kinda..great drop man,dont see 2 many of these around here lately..this is my favorite part here..

Now I Hope these Memories of the past-brings the very last-pains,
the very last drops of tears as if it were the last-rain
I can only save-these-years-u-left-me
As I kneel in the front of ur grave-wit-tears-so-empty,
my knees filled with grass-stains...

must be the chorus type stuff^but its fire..keep droppin man stay up

Bobby Star · Post by **Bobby Star** » Tue Jun 10, 2008 9:19 am

damn ARV ! 9/10 ! nice flow and everythin !

Fraud · Post by **Fraud** » Tue Jun 10, 2008 3:16 pm

this shit was deep, especially cuz my grandma died about a month ago, i can relate to what youre goin through. Stay up youngin

Dead Silence · Post by **Dead Silence** » Tue Jun 10, 2008 5:24 pm

wow man
thats all i can say is wow
so deep shit right there.
i felt this one. it was real deep man.
im glad i read this one. real glad.
some of the rhymes thru off ur flow a bit but overall it was a grade A peice

9.6/10

DressToKill · Post by **DressToKill** » Wed Jun 11, 2008 2:13 am

Nice multies dude..not forced at all which is sometimes hard to do when you get into the peice..this was consistent and the flow was on point also..not much to ciritque just a good overall drop

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