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-TraMaTiK-
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

heres somethin ive had saved for a while like maybe a month i thought id drop n get some feed back,ne kinda feed wud help http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6431828

BTV Productions w/ Laydee Geey on the hook
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

yo ! the track is hott, ur flow and delivery still need practice, it sounds like u need to open up ur throat ( NO HOMO!!!!!) and breathe more, it may relax ur voice... i mean im no one to talk jus givin my thoughts about it.. ur mos def gettin better bro, and i applaud ur dedication.. big ups man
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Post by Viral »

yo dis track is pretty good...one problem...ur flow doesnt change...like at all...ur lyrics r good n shit...but ur flow is da exact same on this as it was on the collab we did.....also ur mic...is pickin up ass loads of air...n i can hear hissing anytime u speak and wat not....daawggg...send me ur vocals!!...ill mix it up for ya...otherwise it was good man....vocals could be upped abit more too...beat is sorta loud compared to em...keep it up man...n get at me for any mixing
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Post by Omega Bill »

This was a lot better than your previous tracks.

The beats real nice. Your lyrics are pretty good. Only problems I have is like Viral said the occasional hissing from the breaths, it's just white noise. Your delivery is better, but your flow remains the same. Not as monotone as previous drops, seems like you're just going with it now instead of forcing a delivery, and it's turning out good , man.

Stay up and definetley keep dropping.
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Post by Cee4 »

this was nice. nice concept and lyrics as expected. your flow is getting better with every track you do. only problem is your delivery. i dont what you can do man coz i`ll be honest theres something kinda weird about your delivery. sounds kinda robotic to me. (dont know if that makes sense). but still i aint into audio so that could be down to your mic.

anyway keep droppin man
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Post by MadKNiFe »

The hook is peng! But I think I got a lil prob with ur part, apart from not being able to here everything - your rhyme scheme was decent but sometimes, it sounds rushed, other times it sounds slowed down- as in not really into time, as far sa time signature is concerned

nice piece anyways - work on ur mic
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