RAP

[- Mutual -]

Noobie Here G.O.D.D

[- Mutual -]

lets spit lines to commit crimes
split rhymes here at bad times
to spit shine i find addictive in my mind
on da grind shootin at ya from be-hind
actin kind to police houndem down like franken-stein
one day ya see me on ya TV rhymin flows so easy
while rappers stay up to see there video played once on B E T
mine played every 20 mins so quickly
number 1 in da charts and in da streets
homies rappin over my beats
gettin me as feats
but then there comes da haters the creaters
while my dreams higher dan sky scrapers low skater couldnt get a date for later
a mind grater
but they can power this they powerless superman i'm cryptonite
actin sour as they cower to scared to fight

[Arvincible]

Well you need to practice on ur multis, u have a decent flow for a noobie
You should keep spittin and writing to define your style more

But yea, keep it up man, if u wanna practice, hit the cyphers and if you think ur ready to battle
Hit somebody up in the callout opponent thread, call me out if u like as well.
Simple as that. Peace

[- Mutual -]

thanks for da advice man

[complexity]

Basically, you write with clear thoughts.

Now you just need to be more creative and original.

I guess this is my favorite line

"but then there comes da haters the creaters
while my dreams higher dan sky scrapers low skater couldnt get a date for later "

The flow is decent like arv mentioned.

Keep it up.

[- Mutual -]

thanks for the feed back i'll work on it

[- Mutual -]

ya lyrical state
a miracle late
change ya spirtual state
not to physical hate
but a subliminal message fo a lyricist to create
starrin down da barrel to scared to wait
the tension builds up you need to vacate
outta this place cause ya a disgrace
shit lyrics that U need to misplace
so if we show nice ness just a matter of grace
tryna beat us up just to win da race
we dont even wanna look at ya face
we will win if U take the bait
really it's all a matter of haste