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~Symbolikull~
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A Man Needs Motivation So i'm Not Even Gonna Write For Feed
i'm Gonna Pick Up Tha Pen With Hate And Spite Ya Seeds
As A Youngin i Never Made Honor Roll it's Like i Fight Degrees
Some Say i'm Morbid Others Say He Writes What He Sees

nice shit man, flowed real well

Moms Was Satisfied Without Money As Long As She Had Crack in Tha Pipe
Never Sheltered That's Why When i Turned 16 i Dissapeared in Tha Black Of Tha Night
i Witnessed Tha Blackest Of Nights Got Jumped Cuz i'd Turn My Back To Tha Fights
i Bring Tha Biggest Truths To Tha Page That's Why i Spit Crack When i Write

liked this too.

the parts that were good were good and the parts that werent so good were ok....7/10
i'll smack yuh with rage i force multis outta my ass to the page
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Post by Brah-Vo »

Shit was nice overall.

Could sorta tell this was a quick piece. But u still did it righteous
Flow was koo, this piece was real talk. Alotta people could relate to this

8.5/10

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A Man Needs Motivation So i'm Not Even Gonna Write For Feed
i'm Gonna Pick Up Tha Pen With Hate And Spite Ya Seeds
As A Youngin i Never Made Honor Roll it's Like i Fight Degrees
Some Say i'm Morbid Others Say He Writes What He Sees
i Love Green Money And Weed Have Always Been Tha Fuel Ta My Fire
Every Man Wants Ta Be Rich i Know it's Cruel But it's My Desire
Aka Raiza Sharp, R.A.I
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As A Youngin i Never Made Honor Roll it's Like i Fight Degrees
Some Say i'm Morbid Others Say He Writes What He Sees
i Love Green Money And Weed Have Always Been Tha Fuel Ta My Fire
Every Man Wants Ta Be Rich i Know it's Cruel But it's My Desire
Picture A Youngin in Tha Projects No Food On Tha Table
Shitty Diapers in Tha Bed i Grew Crude From Tha Cradle
Moms Was Satisfied Without Money As Long As She Had Crack in Tha Pipe
Never Sheltered That's Why When i Turned 16 i Dissapeared in Tha Black Of Tha Night
i Witnessed Tha Blackest Of Nights Got Jumped Cuz i'd Turn My Back To Tha Fights


i Dont Care Wud Dese Niggahz Say.. Dat Shit Wus CRACK^^^...
Pure Raw Son..

Overrall it Wus a Good Piece.. i Liked it Betta Den Why i Write Part 1
Cause Dat Part i Just Posted
How u Brought Dat Emotion wus just Bananaz

Keep Droppin My Niggah

Stay Up & Stay Active
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Post by 16 Micz »

you suck.
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Post by Haz »

Dawg..
Fa'real Who Are You?
Have u Eva Sat & Listened To Ur Beats?
in All Reality Your a Fuckin Embarrasment To This Site
I Neva Knew a Rapsite Could Hold a Emo Fuck..
Plus When u Use To Drop Ya Shit Suckd Ass...
Come On Now Do Ya Self a Favor & Do da Weezy Wee
go Ova Dose on Some Syrrup u Fag
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Post by snowgoon »

I liked it it duke.. read smoothly... was consistant, and I felt the topic matter..
butter son,

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16 Micz
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Post by 16 Micz »

-.HaZarD.- wrote:Dawg..
Fa'real Who Are You?
Have u Eva Sat & Listened To Ur Beats?
in All Reality Your a Fuckin Embarrasment To This Site
I Neva Knew a Rapsite Could Hold a Emo Fuck..
Plus When u Use To Drop Ya Shit Suckd Ass...
Come On Now Do Ya Self a Favor & Do da Weezy Wee
go Ova Dose on Some Syrrup u Fag
lol arent you bisexual?
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Post by Haz »

yea so what

^^^^^

Why Did u Edit My Post Afta Bannin Me u Homo?
LMAO u got problems!!!
Last edited by Haz on Sat Mar 15, 2008 8:23 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Post by 16 Micz »

lol ok
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Post by Haz »

Ur a Chump...
Do Somethin Wid ya Life
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I Would Hook u Up But i Already Gave u Feed My Niggah
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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

micz needs 2 take his lil self centered bad rebel actin self outta everything everyone says,fuckin loser man i swear,newayz

JJ,ghost already quoted what i liked most,but ur flow wuz decent except it seemed a few bars were just barely stretched but it cudda been how i read it,who knows,overall it continued nicely with part 1,keep droppin homie
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Could U Hook a Niggah Up Wid Feed
For "No Stop."?
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Post by Arvincible »

i liked it.

theres ur feed haha
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Post by Omega Bill »

Gotta agree with Ghost and Tram, I hate leaving late feed cause all the quoteables are taken.

Ghost said it best when he said the good parts were really good, and the okay parts weren't bad either. Goes well with part 1.

How many parts are there gonna be?
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