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quick lil freestyle peep

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drugs in mah sektion, makin thugs who bust slugs ask fo hugs when i press em//
and huns i love to undress em, corress em, sex em then foget em//
Intertwined wit real killas, sippin mad goose, and most folks that i deal wit is//
mo nuts then cashews, Already made a mil, but my aims for two//
playing pool, with fools that bet they lifes on bangin coupes, but instead i lay a jewel//
hot as fire, Loc I'm tied up, stayin cool, I'mma bout ta blow like dryers if da coke price rise up//
Inside of, my dashboard, got crack in tact, and a black gat, i ride in a jag, fuck a Black AC//
Most of U foolz stay in debt, but me, I'm puttin thoughs in mo'fuckas heads, all they see is jeopardy//
if they take mo then three steps next to me, I stay ahead of fiends, WHERE I'M FROM//
the real question is red or green?(chile), cock the beam, and quick to dead ya streets//
I'm on a motherfuckin murder mission, killin every bitch in my jurisdiction//
when i insert the clip in, put ya in the dirt fo missin each and every word was written
I'll kill u dawg, lyrically or with tha ber-etta. its wut-eva//
cuz u kno i squeeze arms like I'm checkin my blood pressure//


Son I write with the trifeness
Engraved in Tyson
Curse the shots that left BIG and Pac lifeless
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Post by Cee4 »

nice drop Gutta. i pretty much agree with the above comment. your definitly bringin that gangsta shit lol
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Post by Gutta »

thanks homies

i was jus like fuck it im spittin some G shit, thats all i like listen to and spittin so fuck it..

if the fools on illest lyrics think its played out den fuck em

the best rappers to ever touch a mic r gangsta rappers

tru story
I'll kill u dawg, lyrically or with tha ber-etta. its wut-eva//
cuz u kno i squeeze arms like I'm checkin my blood pressure//


Son I write with the trifeness
Engraved in Tyson
Curse the shots that left BIG and Pac lifeless
-Cormega-Verbal Graffiti
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Post by complexity »

"drugs in mah sektion, makin thugs who bust slugs ask fo hugs when i press em//
and huns i love to undress em, corress em, sex em then foget em// "

I've heard this exact same concept, and even rhymes, so many times. ahhh.

"Intertwined wit real killas, sippin mad goose, and most folks that i deal wit is//
mo nuts then cashews, Already made a mil, but my aims for two// "

Not a bad line. The cashew thing was kinda pointless to add, unoriginal wordplay.

"playing pool, with fools that bet they lifes on bangin coupes, but instead i lay a jewel//
hot as fire, Loc I'm tied up, stayin cool, I'mma bout ta blow like dryers if da coke price rise up//"

Nice rhyme scheme.

"Inside of, my dashboard, got crack in tact, and a black gat, i ride in a jag, fuck a Black AC//
Most of U foolz stay in debt, but me, I'm puttin thoughs in mo'fuckas heads, all they see is jeopardy//"

It's straight.

if they take mo then three steps next to me, I stay ahead of fiends, WHERE I'M FROM//
the real question is red or green?(chile), cock the beam, and quick to dead ya streets//

Nice swerve on the rhyme scheme, though I don't know if the end rhymed enough.

I'm on a motherfuckin murder mission, killin every bitch in my jurisdiction//
when i insert the clip in, put ya in the dirt fo missin each and every word was written//

Best bar of the drop.

Overall, the flow was ok, it could have been better, the creativity was weak, but the writing and schemes were pretty good.

Usually, when I finish reading a drop from you, I have a better, overall reaction though.

Cool drop, anyways.

Ps: I like the gangster shit, because nobody really uses that style on this site.
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Post by Gutta »

thanks for the feed plex


and if the flow seemed choppy or w/e it was cuz it was a quick freestyle


uppin
I'll kill u dawg, lyrically or with tha ber-etta. its wut-eva//
cuz u kno i squeeze arms like I'm checkin my blood pressure//


Son I write with the trifeness
Engraved in Tyson
Curse the shots that left BIG and Pac lifeless
-Cormega-Verbal Graffiti
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Post by RH1NO »

i enjoy readin ya drops homie

I'm on a motherfuckin murder mission, killin every bitch in my jurisdiction//
when i insert the clip in, put ya in the dirt fo missin each and every word was written//

^^fav bar as plex stated

not the best drop from you but overall was pretty solid lot of different concepts

and kept me entertained... nice 1
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