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Ana's Victim.

Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 5:50 pm
by Stina
OH SNAP ..this is OLDDDDD. i wrote it about 2 or 3 years ago, still one of my favorite writings though. Oh and "Ana" is short for Anorexia.

you'll never notice it
well at least not at first
its not a disease
its a disorder, a curse

people would tease - "she's so fat"
but now shes too thin
everytime her hunger grew
she controlled it

she ate once a while
but later threw it up
gums sore, mouth bled
she became less healthy then she was

her family was concerned
she only weighed seventy-nine
her doctor warned if she got to sixty
her body could shut down, she could die

she payed no mind
her parents forced her to eat
she began taking laxitives, water pills
she cried herself to sleep

her skeletal frame
her hair thinning, falling out
her skin turning gray
she lost control, then passed out

she lays now
underneath a heavy stone
she was starving for perfection
but she wasnt alone

many people dont understand
many others do
anorexia nervosa
has taken the lives of others too

you'll never notice it
well at least not at first
its not a disease
its a disorder, a curse

Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 11:29 pm
by drunken jesus
one of the most poetic pieces in this section, it was straight some of it was sloppy but overall it was pretty well put together

good job representing fat bitches

Posted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 11:40 pm
by Spoof
wow that was a very good poem! I loved it! so creepy and terrible.

she ate once a while
but later threw it up
gums sore, mouth bled
she became less healthy then she was

she payed no mind
her parents forced her to eat
she began taking laxitives, water pills
she cried herself to sleep
^^^^my fav parts of it

props!

Posted: Tue Apr 24, 2007 1:57 pm
by SlickMex
drunken jesus wrote:one of the most poetic pieces in this section, it was straight some of it was sloppy but overall it was pretty well put together

good job representing fat bitches
fat bitches LMAO..

Posted: Thu Apr 26, 2007 3:05 pm
by Stina
lol awl poor fat bitches ;/
thanks guyss :]

Posted: Mon Apr 30, 2007 3:06 pm
by Viral
ima have to agree wit DJ on this.....i thought the intro n outro was a pretty good idea for it.....being that its 2 or 3 years old...lol u were packin poem skills back then huh..hahhaa...u should keep at it for sure.....i demand another one!!..hahaha...

Posted: Mon May 14, 2007 5:45 pm
by Lawgix
this was some really good stuff stina... very well done... 8/10 congrats keep it up!

Posted: Wed May 16, 2007 10:11 am
by RH1NO
i agree with th 8/10 maybe 8.5 solid great drop havent heard from you in a while you should drop more like this