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I have no regrets im sittin by my window holdin my tec im watchin niggaz
walk by which one ima shot next
I keep a vest close to my chest I thinkin niggaz tryin kill me so its best
I see the world as a cruel place I wish somebody take my place
Im sick of tired livin in diz world of hate
I ask God do I have fate he tell me look son u gotta get ya mind straight
so Im sittin thinkin in dis cold cold room askin myself will I be dead soon
I got my gun to my head now will I die soon
boom,boom,I think I shot myself If I leave diz world nobody wouldnt care
so wen Im gone no need to ask why only thing u can do now iz juz cry
May I go sleep I ask him he tell me son u may Rest In Peace now
let me sleep dont forget me I will alwayz be a G
But I will neva be around cuz I dont think im free yet datz why dumbas still holdin diz tec but my life alwayz been a war zone and I rather be Stuck in A Cold World On My Own

it was nice but it would have been better w/o the gun talk nice drop tho

The story didn't keep my interest. You need more creativity. You had the story all put together in your head. You just need to let the pen & pad help make it really come alive. Not just duplicate the idea you had.

It wasn't as vivid as it could have been.