Stuck In A Cold World(On My Own)

[URKMAN]

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I have no regrets im sittin by my window holdin my tec im watchin niggaz
walk by which one ima shot next
I keep a vest close to my chest I thinkin niggaz tryin kill me so its best
I see the world as a cruel place I wish somebody take my place
Im sick of tired livin in diz world of hate
I ask God do I have fate he tell me look son u gotta get ya mind straight
so Im sittin thinkin in dis cold cold room askin myself will I be dead soon
I got my gun to my head now will I die soon
boom,boom,I think I shot myself If I leave diz world nobody wouldnt care
so wen Im gone no need to ask why only thing u can do now iz juz cry
May I go sleep I ask him he tell me son u may Rest In Peace now
let me sleep dont forget me I will alwayz be a G
But I will neva be around cuz I dont think im free yet datz why dumbas still holdin diz tec but my life alwayz been a war zone and I rather be Stuck in A Cold World On My Own

[Lawgix]

it was nice but it would have been better w/o the gun talk nice drop tho

[complexity]

The story didn't keep my interest. You need more creativity. You had the story all put together in your head. You just need to let the pen & pad help make it really come alive. Not just duplicate the idea you had.

It wasn't as vivid as it could have been.