Life ? # 2

[$hayne]

You Ever Day Dream, While You Wonder About The Past?
When We Were Younger, All Smiles And The Laughs..
Now It's All About The Prophet And Cash..
Some Jus Don't Think They Jus Cock It And Blast..
Seems Like Our Innocense We Lost It Fast..
No One's Lookin' Towards The Day They Pass..
Now I Praise Our Wayz We Used To Have..
And Mad Lies Commin' From The All The Embassys..
Now We're Bad Guys, We Got Less Friends Than Enemies..
I Bet Jesus's Dad Crys Lookin' At Us When He Breathes.//
I Ain't Ever Been With The Glock, If I Was I'd Prolly Sit And Stop
And Put It Down, Thinkin' How Many Family Faces Would It Frown?
Shit Ain't Good In Any Hood Or Town, Thinkin' About Hope, Could It Drown?
And Dissapear, And Have Everyone Livin' With Some Fear
Now Visions Cloudy When I Was Young It Was Crystal Clear,
Now I'm Losin' Friends Sittin' With A Closed Fist And Tears.
Rememberin' The Past How Short It Last, Damn I Really Miss Them Years.//


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[-TraMaTiK-]

And Mad Lies Commin' From The All The Embassys..
Now We're Bad Guys, We Got Less Friends Than Enemies..

tru^^

i liked this whil piece tho man..i dont tend 2 like a while piece usually bits n pieces but it was hot..props

[Momeijah]

u Could Work On imagination And imagery More, as Usual ur Multis Didnt Seem Forced at All. Keep Droppin it Was Pretty Decent But The Above Things i Mentioned Makes a World Of Difference.

[Stina]

very true, great lines dropped in my opinion.

[B-Bear]

Shit Ain't Good In Any Hood Or Town, Thinkin' About Hope, Could It Drown?
And Dissapear, And Have Everyone Livin' With Some Fear
Now Visions Cloudy When I Was Young It Was Crystal Clear,
Now I'm Losin' Friends Sittin' With A Closed Fist And Tears.
Rememberin' The Past How Short It Last, Damn I Really Miss Them Years.//

really feelin that part mayne.. overall it was like micz said a lil basic, but i liked it.. u talk straight off ya chest so it's hard to be all that creative with it.. but try and create a lil bit of clever imaginery.. agree with domino, that makes a lot of diffenrence.. especially in these type of verses