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the struggle within

Post by drunken jesus »

just a lil piece i wrote quick, i'm gonna finish it eventually

from my arrangements of thought the matrix was spawned grace of a god
maintaining my sanity staying in dark places its odd but in place of my heart
is an IOU stating it wasn't much taking this off when it was drained from the start
gray with stains from the days i was praying to god to save me but lost
him in conversations to deep to relate to or respond i'm staying awake in the odd
hours when ya'll laying i drop masterpieces rap releases innovating the art
on some primo shit with a scheme so sick emo chicks carving my name in their arm
jesus is back with a beam on a ghat blazing a lazer light show cleaning my path
with psychosis at nights frozen from demons seen in my past cant seem to relax
without breathing a pack or tweaking with a little itty bit of leak in the hash
i'm in need of an immediate path outta the darkness feds surround my apartment
telling me to get on the ground when they barge in then the sound of my heart hits
its just a delirium i'm fearing the insanitys gonna be getting the best of me
in a plan to be testing me before i can stand with a legacy the man i was meant to be
died with my college career never evolving so myself is all that i fear hollow
swallowing beers aiming guns at my shadows thinking a stalker is near
voices and day dreams is all that i hear sitting calm drifting off in another dimension
descended from my mothers intentions of death progressed to an ugly depression
that i struggle to beat when i hustle on streets where another weeks another deception
its hell but i developed a subtle ascention through the love of the essence
of the drums and the message and release of this fucking agression
thats got me overstrung and confessing everthing i done & its testing
my creativity with scriptures i paint vividly instrumentals i make spiritually
if you ain't recognize i'm great lyrically you simple just ain't hearing me


http://illestlyrics.com/board/post22800.html#22800
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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Post by -TraMaTiK- »

on some primo shit with a scheme so sick emo chicks carving my name in their arm

lmao^^ 4 sum reason i can picture that..whole buncha girls carvin 'dj or drunken jesus' on their arms...LOL overall it had a lot of imagery and was written very well..that line stuck out tho 4 sum reason..anyways nice drop dj...props..-1-
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Post by Mac »

Shit's Dope Man, One Of Your Better Pieces imo.

Favorite line(s):
"hours when ya'll laying i drop masterpieces rap releases innovating the art
on some primo shit with a scheme so sick emo chicks carving my name in their arm "

Good Shit, Keep Droppin.
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Post by ~Symbolikull~ »

this shit was sickly ill man, i liked the whole piece on the reel homie...

Big UPS!!!
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Post by Momeijah »

Word, Plenty Of Quotables n Shit, Creative as Hell, u Should Drop More Lmao
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Post by complexity »

That's got to be one of my favorite drops from you.

The metaphors, and schemes were sick as fuck.

Uppin for more feedback
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Post by ~*Blitz*~ »

was defo worth reading and it was one of the best writtens ive read on this site, I agree with Tre - you should drop more!
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Post by >Urb@n-Leg3nd< »

Solid Peice Man,Really Like these Lines though


i was praying to god to save me but lost
him in conversations to deep to relate to or respond i'm staying awake in the odd
hours when ya'll laying i drop masterpieces rap releases innovating the art
on some primo shit with a scheme so sick emo chicks carving my name in their arm
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with psychosis at nights frozen from demons seen in my past cant seem to relax
without breathing a pack or tweaking with a little itty bit of leak in the hash
i'm in need of an immediate path outta the darkness feds surround my apartment
telling me to get on the ground when they barge in then the sound of my heart hits


^ Good Shit No Doubt
Keep it Up Homie
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Post by fuck haters »

all i can say is keep it up repin da crew my nigga!
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