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Viral · Post by **Viral** » Wed Jan 24, 2007 9:10 pm

last 2 months have been straight up bullshit....hell i like to call it...alotta shit has happened...changed...we all go thru some hell scenario.....this is my way of kinda gettin it off my chest...this and a few tracks im workin on.....give it a read...leave some feed....itd be much appreciated....

my veins strain from pain,an overload on my brain, sittin on the tracks waitin for the train, thinkin how he coulda done it, i feel sprained, locked up n tortured like a soul with no purpose the worst is, im the birth of a serpent, lerkin for a victim, "viral gone missing" i hope they keep searchin, cuz i dont kno how much longer i can hold on to life, i wont take it but i cant trust this lonely ass knife wit a groan he'd strike till my bones are rice, sellin my intellect, to bring home dough for his wife......

that aint me, i refuse to break down n let the devil start talkin, cuz he aint walkin,his balls aint as big as his mouth, hes a kid from the south, left in a cellar so he thinks he can sin n get out, skins thin n all the bloods seepin thru him, hes been seen by few men, yet im not one of em, my auras too bright it removes the darkness, yet i feel lost in a swarm of carcus, mark this, cuz ill never be the same again, gain a friend but lose who ya love, bruise thru the thug, blood'll ooze thru the slugs, n feel the pain of demons, insane? im steamin!,contain this semen or be left wit the son of satan, wen guns r blazin i stand in the cross fire, hopin for a hit, pokin wit a stick at dead men on the battle grounds, im rattled now...wats love wen u get battered down?...a hot mug to the face, maybe itll wake me up...tape me shut, controversy gets skipped, brought to the stake...hes up, dropped wit a noose to the neck nailed n fused to a deck, but they claim its a cross.......

ive been thru hell, scorched by the flame n torched by my name, no remorse ive been slain so of course i can claim my sort that remains is a port of a game, banned n denied of release, its called paradise...were supposed to rise to our feet, trapped on this planet forced to ride wit the beef.......we cant all cut it up n swallow, most stay hollow, but ill fill myself up with it all...cuz no one can destroy these vessels......

Viral · Post by **Viral** » Wed Jan 24, 2007 9:13 pm

http://illestlyrics.com/board/post18564.html#18564

heres a link of somethin i left feed on.....i forgot bout that....n i dont feel like gettin nagged at like a 4 year old...so i dropped one...lol

Momeijah · Post by **Momeijah** » Wed Jan 24, 2007 9:17 pm

Even Tho u Never Structured it, it Was Fire Lol. Consistent Off The Hook Multis, None Seemed Forced. Creativity And imagery Worked Well u Could See The Emotion n Shit So Yah i Liked it. im Hopin u Do This Shit On Audio Tho Lol. The 3rd Part Was The Best So Thats My Fav Lines. Sums The Whole Verse Up. Plenty Was Quotable. Woord Lol

|.R.SON.aLL.| · Post by **|.R.SON.aLL.|** » Thu Jan 25, 2007 1:55 am

This Was a Good Piece ..
i Liked That Shit yo` ..
Even Though it Wasn`t Structured Well ..
i Still Was able to Follow Tha Flow ..
Which is Very Hard to Do ..
So That Was impressive to Me ..

Viral · Post by **Viral** » Thu Jan 25, 2007 3:41 am

thanks for the feed guys...yeah i got sick of structuring but i think ive found out a way for people to be able to read it....maybe next i drop ill structure for everyone so its a bit easier....but again i appreciate the comments...im glad u guys liked it

precise · Post by **precise** » Thu Jan 25, 2007 3:51 am

not everythings gotta be structured. this was hot shit man, spewed up alotta emotion. kinda piece you dont try and structure just keep typin n flow it.

good shit

B-Bear · Post by **B-Bear** » Thu Jan 25, 2007 6:36 pm

yeah homez..definelty a nice drop.. really felt thaqt shit.. thought ya second and the third versewas the strongest.. impressed by the the flow,even if itit wasnt structured at all..overall shit was really hot!

Viral · Post by **Viral** » Fri Jan 26, 2007 4:23 am

thanks for the feed guys...much appreciate

Mac · Post by **Mac** » Fri Jan 26, 2007 6:48 am

Agreed With All Above, Was Pretty Dope Viral, Keep Doin Ya Thing Homie. I Think This Would Of Sounded Better On Audio, But Shit's Hot Man.

Favorite Line(s):
"ive been thru hell, scorched by the flame n torched by my name, no remorse ive been slain so of course i can claim my sort that remains is a port of a game, banned n denied of release, its called paradise...were supposed to rise to our feet, trapped on this planet forced to ride wit the beef.......we cant all cut it up n swallow, most stay hollow, but ill fill myself up with it all...cuz no one can destroy these vessels......"

Viral · Post by **Viral** » Fri Jan 26, 2007 4:56 pm

thanks for the feed mac....i got alot more feed than i had expected...but most people r slackin..55 views and only 8 responses...some being my own...lol..SLACKERS!...haha...oh well..thanks for those of who did leave feedback...

complexity · Post by **complexity** » Fri Jan 26, 2007 5:51 pm

"locked up n tortured like a soul with no purpose"

Wow. This piece was without a doubt one of your better imagery, story telling tracks, though it wasn't perfect.

The title was really fitting.

Good job. Love to see some content from you. A rare appearance by Emcee Viral

>Urb@n-Leg3nd< · Post by **>Urb@n-Leg3nd<** » Fri Jan 26, 2007 5:57 pm

Very Nice Viral,Kept my Attention,Flowed Great,As Some above Said Didnt Anything Seemed Forced...
Would Also like to hear this On Audio...Keep it Up Homie

Viral · Post by **Viral** » Sat Jan 27, 2007 5:49 am

yes very rare indeed...lol...thanks again to all of u that left feed back and to the two who jst did....be expectin 2 audios from me soon...drunken jesus is finishing up one beat n im finishin up another song...so there should be some audios up quite soon

Kurse · Post by **Kurse** » Sat Jan 27, 2007 11:08 am

Kudos to Viral.

I gotta say...it's actually sum better work outta you. Take it from someone who's been watching you grow in this game. Everyone is talkin about the structure and shit...and it's cool...I understand cuz if it's structured it's easier to follow, but if anybody understands it it's me. I've read ur rhymes in the flesh right off the page. I know how you write and how to ready what you write. I like that fact that you've put more "soul" behind this one...it gives it element. See...I'm so used to reading ur flow and how you pace urself...I can hear it in my head as I read it. Bottom line...good job.

Anger Manij'ment Entertainment...BACKDOWN!!!

Viral · Post by **Viral** » Sat Jan 27, 2007 11:18 am

word bro...thanks for the feed its much appreciated....yeah i decided to give my shit more element lately...hahaha....im done wit not having topics...it bores me

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