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i come to ya room and take you back to hell
you in doom , you stuck in my fucking realm
i beat ya heads off,till the angels of heaven can't take enough
and i cough ya spit to fuck u up , have you chainde and hand cuffed
i eat ya babies ,i eat ya fucking families
my lines surge up a chill to ya spine like a fucking desease
i captivate yoursoul and put it in a deep freeze
i'm hungry for war so watch out
you live me dying tomorow , you read those lines i blow ya brains out
i'm gonna tell you what this is all about
thats revenge for day i got knocked out
i couldn't sleep cuz my head was hurting
swollen with pain and burning
i stayed up all nite crying
i could't remain in the light cuz the good in me was dying

so i take you one by one
i break ya fucking limbs one by one
until the enemies and the pains are gone
its a never ending mission son
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Post by Viral »

better than ur last one..but could still use some work...sounds like somethin id write back in the day wen i always had pissed off verses n shit..lol...if u can get a rhyme scheme going ur verses would b alot better...and less repetition of words...if ne thing jst take a good 30 minutes and make a verse....seems like ur puttin these together in a matter of 5 minutes...jst a freestyle type...if u give it more of a thought process ull come out wit alot better lines and rhymes n stuff like dat...keep tryin tho..
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

i eat ya babies
lmfao must be related to allkillah

as far as wat to tell u.. pretty much wat viral said.. just keep practicing
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Post by drunken jesus »

Nah, I ain't related to nobody wack, word is bond my grandma could shit on him
Respect this, specialist, black, testing this and get ya necklace jacked
Your after name scratched up off my guestlist, party freak
You the type of nigga that'll hardly speak unless you spoken to
You throw a cold screw but sober up when I'm approaching you
At the same time we postin two niggaz on that ass
Thats gonna do what they supposed to do the limelight
Snatched away from you because its my night
Killarm' blaze hotter than twilight, you better get ya lines right
Half of these crabs cant even rhyme right
[Killa Sin]

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