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Meika
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how i been feelin about you for awhie ..

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Boy please dont play with ma heart/
to learn to love you is a lesson i shoulda learned from the start/
i dont want us to grow apart/

How i been feelin about you is unexplainable/
you and your body is unbearable/

layin next to you feelin your hot breath on my back/
your presence gets me high and brethe is what i lack/

its like god sent me an angel from the heavens above/
i dont want anything but your love

i wana be your one and only/
one call away baby when your lonely/
tell me how ya feel when you hold me/

because when im in your arms and look into your eyes/
i forget about everything in life/

hold me, kiss me, & sqweeze me tight/
i wana sleep next to you threw the whole night/

when i wake up your what i wana see when i open my eyes/
lets make this last because im not ready for another goodbye/

i lost you once now i got you back/
those sleepless nights are never coming back/

i get a txt from you and a real smile runs across my face/
the hole in my heart you healed and took its place/

let me be the one to take away all your fears/
if you cry baby ill whipe your tears/

i know you seen alota things in your life baby put trust in me/
im down for you so let all those worries be/

ill give you every inch of me and my love/
ill hold it down till im called above/

i wont hurt you im not like these other girls/
i really want you to be the only guy in my world/

all these words are comin from the bottom of my heart/
so hold it baby dont tear it apart/
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Re: how i been feelin about you for awhie ..

Post by Glamtrash »

The choice of topic is of course heartfelt, but overdone. The structure, parts that don't rhyme, and lack of vocabulary make it difficult for me to read. However, I wish you the best of luck with the boy.

Work out the kinks and keep em comin'.

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