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new kid on d block

Posted: Sat Oct 15, 2011 9:22 am
by ninenite
Now everybody stand back, while I lace dis track wit anthrax, terrorism on dis riddim like rap from iraq, I use metaphors like swords, inna lyrical war, I launch missile after missile of encrypted thoughts,nukes are last resorts, its like I'm reluctant, u really have 2 push my buttons, press my back against the wall wen there's no more options, scream fuck em & launch weapons of mass destruction

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Re: new kid on d block

Posted: Sat Oct 15, 2011 12:24 pm
by CBK
yo nice flow u got goin there man, its a lil short tho, also try an structure it better so it reads easier.

good post tho dude the lyrics were abit overplayed tho, try to be more unique with your concepts.

keep postin man

Re: new kid on d block

Posted: Sat Oct 15, 2011 11:06 pm
by Future
yeah what he said short unstructured and played but other then that not bad

Re: new kid on d block

Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2011 1:36 pm
by COMPUTERCHIPS
this was a cool start.
I would say write more and
like the others said, structure it
so people can read it better.
Keep writing.
peace