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NASTY KID.

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I release the beast inside of me,a freak complete with mightily
elite techniques, in night I be at peace with beats, you might just see
me re-peat all kinds of these, lethal feats so violently
fuck you bitch, now my dick, will breach your teeth for eyein me
I freakin need some privacy, do you people see the irony
cause I can only sleep with, dead females on either side of me
I frequently, seek to preach these evil deeds, my title be
secret freak, who speeds to bleed these peeps and feast so silently
repeatedly, he defeats these weaker fleets entirely
mcs deceased, he believes to be a beast you gotta be
sick in the head, Im sinkin in meds, my victims are fed
parts of hearts, fingers and legs, this chick is a preg-
nant bitch with the dreads, I wont kill her just yet
Ill slit her stomach and take out her infant and then
use it to beat her until their both missing a head
visions of death, bring me joy, they make you frikken piss in the bed
I take lives away, when I portray the pyscho ways at the slightest sight of prey,
I will take a knife to fakes tonight and break their spinal blades when the vinyl plays, its final days.
gentlemen, dismemberment is the correct method for endin men
I recommend pendulums that slice you fakes, I will take my weapon and
cut up you feminine specimens, you dumb fucks, I dont represent aggression an
I do this for the pleasure son, nothins better to this veteran, than exposin your skeletons
the docs hopin the medicine, stops, devoting adrenaline
to my brain, Im insane, nope just fuckin incredible.

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Last edited by CBK on Thu Oct 13, 2011 10:44 am, edited 1 time in total.
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I release the beast inside of me,a freak complete with mightily elite techniques, in night I be at peace with beats, you might just see me re-peat all kinds of these, lethal feats so violently fuck you bitch, now my dick, will breach your teeth for eyein me I freakin need some privacy, do you people see the irony cause I can only sleep with, dead females on each side of me I frequently, seek to preach these evil deeds, my title be secret freak, who speeds to bleed these peeps and feast so silently repeatedly, he defeats these weaker fleets entirely

rhyme scheme is nice here... I was really feeling this part... thumbs up....

mcs deceased, he believes to be a beast you gotta be sick in the head, Im sinkin in meds, my victims are fed parts of hearts, fingers and legs, this chick is a preg-nant bitch with the dreads, I wont kill her just yet Ill slit her stomach and take out her infant and then use it to beat her until their both missing a head visions of death, bring me joy, they make you frikken piss in the bed

you tried to keep ya rhyme scheme up but it seemed forced in this section... wasn't really feeling it

The rest is kinda slow compaired to the rest... I'm liking the lyrical content more but it was quite a change of pace...
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holy shit dude....homer....killed this shit
I'm diggin' it man, the flow was bonkers and vibe was nice
I'm feeling the switch ups your doing....reminds me of me
thats some sexy shit...nice drop my dude...keep writing
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Post by Kau the Lion »

Really liked the rhyme scheme in the beginning. Kind of lost steam as it neared the end, though there were still a few standout lines in the second half. like this:
I take lives away, when I portray the pyscho ways at the slightest sight of prey,
I will take a knife to fakes tonight and break their spinal blades when the vinyl plays, its final days.
gentlemen, dismemberment is the correct method for endin men
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^ thanks man... i appreciate the feed guys
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Flow was craaazy!! showed nice imagery with your words.
Really diggin this one!
Good shit!
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