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[video]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wurrd7-WGi4[/video]


Temporarily lifted I guess the party just shifted
I mean what can I get with are u based on a image?
or are you real with everything u been given?
baby girl I could be trippin', if not, I get it
you just wanna live life to the limit, forget it
move to the next level, Wiz with it, get with it
too many digits got me mixed up to the point I split it
you dephicted a whole different vibe from what I'm given
see you don't need a man but your way too descriptive
like you want this, this and whatever else is fitted
so of course I could snap back but I rather forget it
continue with livin' instead of hearing you bitchin'
you want someone to fuck you riiiiight
but you spend all night just givin' up them digits
behind closed doors you just want to get conflicted
like "I really wanna do this but I need a man with it"
to the point i get sickened, hit the road in minutes
phone calls every other minute, tellin' me you missin'
who you gave your heart too, look shorty do what you got to
cuz I'm not about to, interview with a vampire to Nosforatu
cuz the problems you bring just got me hittin' another obstacle
3 AM...I got a lot to...do so sorry I gotta move on to...
the next one, the next one, have fun with the ex hun
cuz as long as I got an erec-shun, I'm up for elect-shun
no longer the first impres-shun I'm a regular compression
pushed down to the point all you ever did is heard bout ol' me
but when I think about this whole night..it's don't work out for me...
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Post by Kuhlerblynd »

Wow Qwartz, this is nicely done. I can definitely relate to this piece. The flow was on point throughout, and I really like how in some places you were matter-of-fact with your approach, while in others you let the metaphors do the talking. YOu balanced that well. I wish you would have wrote a whole track to this though, you were killing it. Nice work fam. I really like how you closed it out too. Keep writing!
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Post by Quix »

Yup , i was feeling this man. flow was crazy at times doggy...lyrically nothing amazing, but you did yah thangmah dude. nice drop
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