P_A vs chessboard (Chessboard wins)

[plague_arsonist]

4-5 bars house rules

[-ChessBoard-]

Ok...

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[-ChessBoard-]

I'm Ownin You,N This Ho Is A Big Shame!Phony Is Real Name...I'm Boss,Even Your Name Says It...Your ONLY A P.A//So Lemme Test This Punk,He Breathin Heavy Like He's Chest Is Fucked/n Arse Couldn't Be -Fuckin Incredible- If He Had SEX WITH HULK//You Prolly Asking Yourself,"What's He Been Quiet For",see I'm Tight N Bored/Ars A Heavy Wanker...I Mean He's -Hooked To The Hand- Worse Than A PIRATES CLAW//You Strong With The Arms,Giving His Hand Some!...He's Got Tons Of Groupies,I'm Kidding,His Fans Dumb/He Can Rest In Peace With His -Hand On His Chest-,You'd Swear He Singin An Anthem!//Im Provin His Plays Are Weak/N You'd Swear He's An Aids Victim,The Way He LOSING TO ARV!//

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-- Fri Sep 16, 2011 2:34 am --

I Can't Do This Link Ish...But You Can Cheq His Battle With Arvincible...Hence The Last Bar...N Plague Arsonist - P.A.....Voted In PA V Comeback Kid

[plague_arsonist]

im not even impressed by chess, shoulda stuck to the board games you aint made for rap/
well even there u fail im 3 moves ahead have his pawns dropped and his king trap

ill run thru ur knights with the swing of my mighty sword/
or if u prefer the tech leave u leaking red now u more of a checker board

playing games with me is life or death so i suggest u dnt fail/
but since u a CHESSBOARD this night/KNIGHT u gonna have to take an L

act foul get shooked and hooked by my rook/
im no kasporov but i saw thru like an open book

i promise u if i pull the CHOPPER u gone need a PAD to land on/
you a chess board just some for my pawns to stand on

[Arvincible]

this battle was pretty close fellas

Chess

So Lemme Test This Punk,He Breathin Heavy Like He's Chest Is Fucked/
n Arse Couldn't Be -Fuckin Incredible- If He Had SEX WITH HULK/

PA

ill run thru ur knights with the swing of my mighty sword/
or if u prefer the tech leave u leaking red now u more of a checker board

^ best bar

both verses were reflecting both writers.. my advice to chess is to learn to press the enter key.. the easier ur structure is to read the more effective it will be. And as far as your dissing goes i think the punches were right where they needed to be its just ur set up needs a lot of work..
other than that ur on track..

PA i think you have the right idea when it comes to attacking your opponent already, the problem with ur lines imo is that the delivery came up short.. so you need more substance overall.. its creativity buddy spend a little more time maybe a few more minutes with ur set up. I think you overdid the chess board play ons too


both of you need work on building your punches, the entertainment level of a battle like this is a 4/10 so for future battles take more time in making a harder hitting verse so ppl would be more eager to read ur shit and vote.

ok categories

punches- Chess
Personals- PA
flow- PA

to me this was a tie, but based on cats- PA gets my vote..

[Blake Downs]

this battle was boring, i think p.a. won in every cateorgorie,p.a. had better punches,rhyme schemes,and peronals
MVGT:p.a.

[NoVeL]

Chess your structure is what really hurt you in this battle. The played bars lacked creativity and some of the lines really didn't make sense. Best bar here -->You Prolly Asking Yourself,"What's He Been Quiet For",see I'm Tight N Bored/Ars A Heavy Wanker...I Mean He's -Hooked To The Hand- Worse Than A PIRATES CLAW//

P.A. you're very basic when it comes to battling and that can come against you in fight with some more charismatic. You've got to capitalize on embarassing your opponent every opportunity you've got. Stray away from basic lines such as these... act foul get shooked and hooked by my rook/
im no kasporov but i saw thru like an open book

MVGT: ChessBoard

[Kuhlerblynd]

Breakdown

Chess-
I'm Ownin You,N This Ho Is A Big Shame!Phony Is Real Name...I'm Boss,Even Your Name Says It...Your ONLY A P.A//

I get this concept behind this, but you could have worded it better to give the delivery more impact in my opinion.

So Lemme Test This Punk,He Breathin Heavy Like He's Chest Is Fucked/n Arse Couldn't Be -Fuckin Incredible- If He Had SEX WITH HULK//

Eh, alright shot at wordplay, but once again, this wasnt something jaw dropping or anything.

You Prolly Asking Yourself,"What's He Been Quiet For",see I'm Tight N Bored/Ars A Heavy Wanker...I Mean He's -Hooked To The Hand- Worse Than A PIRATES CLAW//

My accent doesnt really let claw flow in this, but who am I to say it doesnt flow to you. That pirates claw line was garbage to me anyway. Nothing even half decent about it.

You Strong With The Arms,Giving His Hand Some!...He's Got Tons Of Groupies,I'm Kidding,His Fans Dumb/He Can Rest In Peace With His -Hand On His Chest-,You'd Swear He Singin An Anthem!//

Good imagery, but where's your punchlines, your jokes, your personals?

Im Provin His Plays Are Weak/N You'd Swear He's An Aids Victim,The Way He LOSING TO ARV!//

I didnt care for this part of the verse at all, either.



P.A.-
im not even impressed by chess, shoulda stuck to the board games you aint made for rap/
well even there u fail im 3 moves ahead have his pawns dropped and his king trap

The idea is here, but there's not really a diss involved, from what I'm reading. It's just seems like you are making a statement and that's it.

ill run thru ur knights with the swing of my mighty sword/
or if u prefer the tech leave u leaking red now u more of a checker board

This is getting to be more like it, but it's too simple to be a punchline, you didnt really have a strong nameflip, so this is more of a type of diss than anything.

playing games with me is life or death so i suggest u dnt fail/
but since u a CHESSBOARD this night/KNIGHT u gonna have to take an L

This is at least an attempt at wordplay. Probably the best Ive seen from you so far.

act foul get shooked and hooked by my rook/
im no kasporov but i saw thru like an open book

This doesnt really work in my opinion.

i promise u if i pull the CHOPPER u gone need a PAD to land on/
you a chess board just some for my pawns to stand on

I see what you are trying to do, but this isnt really delivering it either.




----I suggest both you guys read the TEXT HELP 101 thread. It will give you both better ideas.

My vote goes to Chess, simply because more of his verse seemed to actually be harder disses. Both of you guys can use some work, but the potential to be really creative with your bars is there. Keep writing!

[Quix]

Uhmm this was a weak battle. But you both should stick with it and elevate. it will be good for you and the site


But Chess takes this one for me ... for being closer to an actuall battle verse than his opponent.

Vote: Chess

Better attempts at punches, nameplay and creative flow

[Kuhlerblynd]

Votes on this stand at 3-2, with Chess leading.


This needs more votes people!

[ScottJames]

FIRST OFF, BLAKE DOWNS, NEVER EVER SAY A BATTLE IS BORING WHEN U ARE, IMO, THE WORST BATTLER ON THIS SITE...

NOW.. WITH THAT BEING SAID...




CHESS:

I'm Ownin You,N This Ho Is A Big Shame!Phony Is Real Name...I'm Boss,Even Your Name Says It...Your ONLY A P.A//

I GET IT. NOT BAD

So Lemme Test This Punk,He Breathin Heavy Like He's Chest Is Fucked/n Arse Couldn't Be -Fuckin Incredible- If He Had SEX WITH HULK//

PLAYED CONCEPT..

You Prolly Asking Yourself,"What's He Been Quiet For",see I'm Tight N Bored/Ars A Heavy Wanker...I Mean He's -Hooked To The Hand- Worse Than A PIRATES CLAW//

LOL

You Strong With The Arms,Giving His Hand Some!...He's Got Tons Of Groupies,I'm Kidding,His Fans Dumb/He Can Rest In Peace With His -Hand On His Chest-,You'd Swear He Singin An Anthem!//

VERY PLAYED OUT

Im Provin His Plays Are Weak/N You'd Swear He's An Aids Victim,The Way He LOSING TO ARV!//

NO





P.A.

m not even impressed by chess, shoulda stuck to the board games you aint made for rap/
well even there u fail im 3 moves ahead have his pawns dropped and his king trap

NO.

ill run thru ur knights with the swing of my mighty sword/
or if u prefer the tech leave u leaking red now u more of a checker board

AHA, NICE

playing games with me is life or death so i suggest u dnt fail/
but since u a CHESSBOARD this night/KNIGHT u gonna have to take an L

NAH

act foul get shooked and hooked by my rook/
im no kasporov but i saw thru like an open book

NO.

i promise u if i pull the CHOPPER u gone need a PAD to land on/
you a chess board just some for my pawns to stand on

DECENT.. SHITTY SET UP THOUGH..


CLOSE BATTLE
VOTE: CHESS

[-ChessBoard-]

Uppin...plz vote yo

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[88SkyLink]

Well ... This was a very mediocre battle at best. You two did really good, but I'm gonna have to give this to ChessBoard cuz he was more stronger overall than PA. Both of you had some good lines like that Checker and pirate claw line, they're the kind of lines you two should be producing when it comes to battling. PA was also decent with his verse, but I feel that Chess was more consistent. I fell that the both of you DO need some elevation, but you two certainly got potential, so keep battling.
Again, as I said - MVGT ChessBoard

[-ChessBoard-]

5-2,Update

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[Alvin]

Chessboard wins