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He Can Fly!

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I'm in the sky, breathing in the oxygen
And all it's awesomeness, closing my eyes
Envisioning chinese provinces, I'm intolerant
Towards meteorologist and predicted phenomenas
That don't even happen often, animosity for the gossip
They said I couldn't fly, now you see beneath the clouds
When you looking by, I would advise for you to look alive
Open the book of wise wisdom, ignorance is a crooked spine
You can't walk so you want my backbone, thoracics and lumbars
Man you lack those, drinking the blood of another man you bat's throat
Shackles on your feet, dance you asshole, I broke the chains and hoped
To change the game, and I did, deciding I would jump off a cliff, and I lived
Still surprised both wings bend, I won't change shit, forget your acknowledgement
I gotta get rich internally first, inner peace, this is fall, but what falls is a bigger leaf
Me over everything I'll never need a wedding ring until I decide to settle down
And do better things, never, never, land Peter Pan he can soar, he can fly, he can
Even stand on the floor, the best of both worlds, I'm in depth with no nomenclature
We rise and we fall, it is only nature, I'm interstellar like stardust in the galaxies
You in the barn where the sheep and the cattle be, as well as the wolves in your fur
Out your league, I thought I would never succeed coming out the streets, doubt is E
Belief is A, and I'm about a C, and a B is what I'm bout' to be, so fuck pessimist
Who doubted me, they in the basement downstairs, and I'm flying to the outer seas
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Re: He Can Fly!

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I'll be completely honest, the concept was there and expressed consistently throughout, but the way you went about doing it really threw me off in a lot of different places. Just the vocab you used, I guess, the contexts you had certain words used in and things of that nature. It wasn't bad. I liked what you had to say. Keep doing you, though.
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