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aglazey132
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Renegade

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Tips, comments/suggestions.
ya know the deal.
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the quality is nice, i would say up the beat a little bit more. You have a flow but you need to tighten it up a little bit more. Its a little choppy, just keep working at it. I would say try to spit with more emotion too in your delivery. Lyrics are alright what i expect from a song like this.

Definately wanna hear more you have a good voice and great potential. Keep at it
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quality is good..mixxing is niiiice..da adlibs are a lil loud..flo is ..beat was nice ..mellow but rippable 4 sure...uhh ok ..

right now the problem is you need to werk a lil more on ya presence..not soundin that confident..i think ya had some aight emotion but delivery came in on the soft side wich hurts ya presence...

that said i think lyrically this was decent..more on the cypher tip...i like ya multis not bad..just bring the rest around playuh...
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i can see you got more into after the start...took ya a second i guess to get hype..dubs/adlibs are sick...nice track bro, keep it up, post more..
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