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Re: Life and Death

Post by Arvincible »

wow.. this was a great drop man


9.0

i enjoyed every single line multi for multi message for message

very good imagery and diction, the flow was very smooth bro

best ive seen, im glad ur still improving.. keep writing man
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Post by Momeijah »

Yeah I agree with Arv about the message in each line. The multis were the stand out though the flow just didn't break stride at all.

1st 2 bars were my favourite I thought they were dope for the introduction and contributed to the tone of the drop, like the attitude. Keep it up.
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Damn dude this was a pretty fucking enjoyable read. You did the pic justice in this drop, and there's not much more to say than props bruh.
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Re: Life and Death

Post by 88SkyLink »

This is very nice, this is rap philosophy...simple yet effective. this verse fulfilled its purpose, and it explains the true meaning of the depiction. It would've been better if you added another verse, but a good written, keep it up, Peace
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Re: Life and Death

Post by Thu Hem »

wow this was perfectly painted with the lyrics man.....
i like it ... and it does make sense to me.
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Re: Life and Death

Post by pest »

its pretty good drop. some philisophical shit in there dude. real deep.
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that picture would make a dope tat tho ;)

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wow! this was really great, i enjoyed reading it u did a great job!!!
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Re: Life and Death

Post by Meika »

quit interesting . I to like the multies lol
really good drop . remindes me of something my dad would write about .
9.5/10 tf this was exellent lol .
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Re: Life and Death

Post by AntiMaTTer »

shit was dope... i didnt get to read it all cuz im on lunch but the first few bars were pretty hot. ill finish this when i get off work
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Post by Sir Kevin O Shea »

This was a good job doing a topical on a difficult picture.
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Re: Life and Death

Post by Enlightend »

Liked this alot... flow... content... rhyme scheme all good... infact much better then other drops I have seen from u... so props on elevating...
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Re: Life and Death

Post by Arcane »

one of those few peices that you DONT want to end at all man, i love the concept and over all delivery of the peice. very poetic and flow of it is amazing man!
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