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[Soulo]

I try to write my rhymes to have some meaning
beyond clever wordplay and beyond shared feelings
beyond whatever airplay through stereo brainwaves
and beyond any lyrical standard in this day and age
so I take philosophy's approach for optimal results
indulge in the marijuana smoke till I'm terracotta stoned
the brightest underdog so none can overshadow me mentally
with a mic I hold the center of gravity like the letter v
testing me? like the future I never was am always to be
and no one ever saw me nor ever will see

and here's verse #1 of something I'm doing:

I'll show you nothing's free in this life
even in death you pay a fee when you die
when you freeing your mind leaving behind
your carcass rotting cause you finally seeing the light?
what you expecting to see?
a gathering of angels in the heavenly scene? and that death is a dream?
maybe with some vision of hope
but you can't see without your occipital lobe
you poor bastard
you left your thalamus on home planet
dome damaged bone fractures limbs torn in four fractions
partly after metal rods punctured your whole bladder
and blood splattered the car mattress with gore patterns
and soon after your friends and family gathered
and your corpse recycled itself back into matter
so what the fuck you imagine your afterlife to be?
what led your head to even try to capture this scene?
you lost conscience in December you remember that?
and got screwed like a Fender Back body bent in half
but lemme settle facts cause it's the cost of living
the key to life is death cause minds keep us locked in prison
this is priceless wisdom -- life in flashback's a hair too late
and those who justify heaven's gates still have hell to pay.

[vanity]

i really liked it, enjoyed reading it
my fav part;

I'll show you nothing's free in this life
even in death you pay a fee when you die
when you freeing your mind leaving behind
your carcass rotting cause you finally seeing the light?
what you expecting to see?
a gathering of angels in the heavenly scene? and that death is a dream?
maybe with some vision of hope

[Soulo]

Haha, thanks man appreciate that a lot.

[88SkyLink]

An interesting read. I liked the angelic and philosophical touch you put into it, I see you're able to put your thoughts into bars, however the structure seemed a tad bit weird to me, and the title doesn't seem to have any connection with the actual bars..Not taking anything away btw cuz you got skills, and you can certainly become a dope writer, just a little tweaking and improving will do the trick overall a good post, keep it up..peace