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Sir Kevin O Shea
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Lady Flavored Butter Pancakes

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Delicious and creamy, flavors flowing and streaming
both rows of teeth tag-teaming, no crumbs leaving
outside of my tastes, desires and thirsts for it
soaking and sopping up the gravy with absorbence
biscuits with butter, pancakes getting pan flipped
wrap my spatula in a mit for her handle grip
its iron casted, like an all robot stage play
pour out the butter milk to provide the mainstay
of smells and nutritional advantages for strength
open the buffet line, allow me to pick up weight
filling up my plate with stacks of carbohydrates
coming slowly like going to a date, "oh am I late?"
hello miss, give me a kiss sticky like maple syrup
mix it with my breakfast sausage, blended and smeared up...
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Re: Lady Flavored Butter Pancakes

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I gotta say, that was funny...You're passion for Lady Flavoured Butter Pancakes is just..Wow. I like
Delicious and creamy, flavors flowing and streaming
both rows of teeth tag-teaming, no crumbs leaving
That was a really good and funny opener, that was the best bar in the written

outside of my tastes, desires and thirsts for it
soaking and sopping up the gravy with absorbence...filling up my plate with stacks of carbohydrates
coming slowly like going to a date, "oh am I late?"
It was alright, it just seemed to me that the rhymes was stressed


Overall, it was a really good written, not you're best one though but keep at it, peace
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Re: Lady Flavored Butter Pancakes

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If feeling the comedic flair ur bringing to the writtens mayn.. stay funny lol
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