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SHE SAYS F^K LOVE, SHE TIRED OF TRYIN', NEEDS TO GO RELAX IN THE CAYMAN ISLANDS,
WATCH THE WAVES AND TIDES IN, BACK AGAINST THE SUEDE HORIZON, SEAT BACK WAVIN' BYE IN,
A YELLOW YACHT COULD SPOT THE YELLOW TOP WITH THE YELLOW ROCKS WITH A NAME POSEIDON,
ALL CAUSE HER LOVER PUT HIS WAYS BESIDE HIM, HE STANDS GREAT FROM MILES IN, GOT AN ISSUE I CAN,
LEAVE A BLADE INSIDE YA LEG OR HIGH END, THROW YOUR HEAD AWAY IN STIPEND, LIKING THIS GLOBAL POWER,
WE 'STAND AS STRIKING', REACH LAND LIKE VIKINGS,
WATCHIN' U LOTION YA BODY AND KNEES, WITH CAKE AND ICIN' SWALLOWIN' TEA, HOLD UP, ITS BOTHERIN' ME
PARDON CAN WE SPEND A LIL TIME, I'M FOLLOWIN' WE, IN MY MIND LOST CAUSE I'M FOLLOWIN' ME,
AIN'T HOLLOW YOU SEE, IT'S BEYOND THAT, FIRST NIGHT I CAUGHT CONTACT
LIKED THE 'YELLOW SOLSTICE' IN THE PONTIAC FOR SUMMER THOUGH, BUT YOU WANT THE COGNAC FOR SOME REMOTES,
YOUNG BUT OLD THOUGH SOME PROMOTE, PRICES I'D SAY I'M NICEST,
AND YOU CAN TELL BY MY FACADE OF NICENESS, A GRAZE OF BRIGHTNESS, LEAVES THE HATE IN TASTE OF SHYNESS
YOU'LL 'ESCAPE' WHEN CREATIVE PILOT'S
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MIRROR DREAMS
Last edited by NoVeL on Thu Jun 30, 2011 2:03 am, edited 6 times in total.
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Re: MIRROR DREAMS
good shit, this beat is chill, i like... been ages since i read your shit.. definitely improved from what i last remembered, solid piece i think the beat helped the flow for this, otherwise i would say not bad, just structure your bars so its easier for others to read and you're all set

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Re: MIRROR DREAMS
I liked it but about a quarter of their way down it strayed and started to go nowhere rhyme scheme was good so flow was there but it seemed like u sacrificed content for that to happen... its important to balance both...
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Re: MIRROR DREAMS
This is pretty dope novel, I flowed this to the beat first time around with ease. Not bad, but i agree with enlightend about staying on topic. Kinda felt like you drifted a couple times, and i didnt want it to end the way it did, i was looking for more of a closer bar. GET ACTIVE FOOL
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