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Versus Megalodon (No Show)

Post by Kau the Lion »

Megalodon didn't show in the tourney so I was hoping to get some feed on this verse.


A megalodon is a giant shark, a violent part, but not as cool as you’d think.
A fish past his heyday so just like his namesake I’ll make sure this dude is extinct.***

Guy probably talks tough, you’ll hear he was locked up but not knowing what he did.
Let me explain that and why his name was Megalodeon. He liked to show himself to kids. (like Nickelodeon)

He was absent his lost match and once it happened back, that’s no shows for half his battling.****
So if any fighting’s happening, I’m passionate. It won’t be simple math that fractures him.

He’s coming at me lightly cause he couldn’t write heat if he was global warming literature.
I’ll use a bat, man, swing it fierce, and this Joker disappears like his former signature.*

I could guess his sexual preference, in that regard dudes hardly been a charlatan.
Cause his first case of making third base was probably snake charming some army men.

He has dream dates with his future teammates. You know what makes this faggot hard?
He thinks Grim jerking off a scythe is awful nice. Shit, he put it in his avatar.**

He wants Ecks to rest nuts on his chest all while Mic S helps him whack off.**
But enough gay jokes for real, he likes women a great deal. Buy one - get one half off!

Megalodon is ancient history*** cause this lame’s a bitch to me, now let me shed a light.
I’ll never envy anything that M be (Mb) cause it wouldn’t be big unless we see Megabytes.


*His sig picture used to be the Joker, but it's gone now.
**He's trying to join Malicious Activity who's member's include, Grim, Eckstasy and Mic S.
*** A Megalodon is an extinct species of shark.
****His record is 3 - 1. One of his wins is a no show and he received a loss for no showing.

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Post by 32neilz »

Nice kau, best line for me was the snake charming army men, I was lmao at that.
Might just be me but your flow was good but somehow seemed really slow and lazy, imo. Nice drop tho

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Yeah, it was definitely a slow flow on this one. I'm surprised you liked the Army Men line. It was the only generic bar there. Much thanks for the feed, though.
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Post by Moneymaker »

Nice drop i like the first bar. The flow was on point. The only thing about your flow was like 32 said it seemed slow and lazy. But an overall good battle verse. 9/10

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Post by Tha Dark Prince »

Good drop overall, flow slow but on point multis were nice, punches were good, went in on the personal cat 2, lol'd at that dream date bar lol

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Thanks for the feed, guys.

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Post by Thu Hem »

Honestly due to the record i saw in your profile, i mean the wins and loses shit... I thought u must be a respected battler.

but i aint sweatin dis one right here, wat i dig was the flow n thats it

tho.. the opponent u jab with this weak punch, might be less hard, maybe dats y u came soft on him i dnt kno...
jus sayin wat i felt.

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