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strangled by my surroundings, compounding stress
turn on the news and what i found was death
no amount of rest could conquer my mental fatigue
needing sleep smoking weed, oh, if my pencil could see
the devils in me corrupting me slowly from the inside
i confide in others and find that they only chastise
these black eyes pear perilously constantly chasing
facing evacuation of patience from all the stalls and waiting
stating what i see in front of me as a hurtle to leap
i feel like a shell in a rabbit race while the turtles asleep
the word on the street is not enough to slow my roll
i walk the roads but its hard when the tolls my soul
what i sold was gold but it quickly fell an deteriorated
feeling angered at the world falling to inferior statements
my interiors vacant feeling emptied cold and worthless
trying to purchase the gold thats under the surface
to nervous im pacing in circles trying to walk the line
i can unwind the clock but i can never stop the time
i mock my mind talking shit to myself with no pity
some times i feel like were fucked like my whole city
its so shitty but i can usually find the light in the dark
but its hard when your drowning and in a fight with sharks

this was pretty cool the multis were on point as usual really flowed well together the piece stood out nicely though I think you did your thing goooood..nice job my dude keep writing

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Man, you keep fucking dropping bombs everytime you post. It's fuckin fire, dude. I have no pointers, just a request for more work soon. Real shit.

Overall a good piece...though I thought you started way stronger than how you finished...felt like you used too many "but's" towards the end...


i can unwind the clock but i can never stop the time

^^^ liked that line right there. Simple yet effective...

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