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[video]<iframe width="425" height="349" src="http://www.youtube.com/embed/_LGbW6BBXqQ" frameborder="0" allowfullscreen></iframe>[/video]
check it out n tell me wat u think... my verse is 1st

-- Mon May 30, 2011 3:10 am --

well... looks like da video isnt working... so heres da link
http://youtu.be/_LGbW6BBXqQ
my fans throw up dere hands ur fans got Lohans like Lindsey indeed
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your off beat pretty badly, freestyle or not there was little point of the beat, sounds like you're reading off something, the mic is horrible as well, lyrically this is basic, nothing impressive, beat was smooth though, just need to work on your lyrics, delivery, not even quality can make u sound better at this point, love it or hate it that's my honest opinion
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ight I understand u have opinions n all... but how possibly am I offbeat that badly? Ino sum lines I had 2 speed up 2 fit da beat... but Im not offbeat tho
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Post by leeroi green »

you'll be alright homie it sounds rushed and a few of your puches lack pop also you should work on your delivery keep developing until youve got your own style i didnt listen to your buddy but what i heard also sounded like rushed verse if you were freestyling then more than anything you really need to work on delivery if it was a written piece you need to work on structure so as to not need to rush through your bars any way there is always room for improvement practice
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Post by HKX »

^^ not sure wat 2 say cuz they both broke it down but work on ur delivery & presence. Ur not off beat dat bad u did aight on it but da rushin' makes it sound a lil awful. I think if ur were 2 practice & re-record it & stay on beat it'll be better listen. I wasn't feelin' ur boy he needs work u... u killed his verse so dats a good thing.

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yeahhhhh wasn't feelin this at all honestly.... like... very amateurish... the third dude was better than the last two but the last dudes probably the first dude... fuck iuno.... just work on ya flow lol
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Post by Ambiguous Realm »

its not completely off, the landings are eh, the build up is .. ugh.. haha, anyways man its nothin that u can't improve, my first audio ever was just as bad, don't take what i say n let it bring u down, if anything take what i've said and try to prove me differently
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hmm..uhmm the lyrics seem ..ehh imo...quality is low too..

okay da beat is trippy..uhhmm so is ya flo if you da first guy...uhhm yeah your off beat especially on ya inners..

2nd guy's flow is a lil bit more in da pocket...haha
lyrics are actually decent..

uhhm this sounds more like a jam session then a premeditated song..well keep werkin on ya game...youll elevate...1
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