Sniplet of a new song

[Defiance]

this shits in the works... tell me what you think of this verse snipplet
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Hollow thoughts hollow dreams
bad decisions follow me
all will see what is calling me
with velocity, cause the boss in me
is where it ought to be
obviously, there is no stopping me
ya better whisper when ya talk to me
prom-is-ing i'll blow the scene
so obscene i'm raising dopamines
better hold ya queen
its poetry with potency
flowin as my soul is free
ripping as i blow the breach
holding down the flow with ease
like i was the rolling breeze
climbing through the op-en-ing
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you'll have to wait for the actual tune to hear the rest

but let me know what you think of the first half of my verse

[Arcane]

i love the flow of it. Every word and line connects so smoothly.
if this is just the snippet can't wait for the whole thing. keep it up man