Call It Deep

[MonuMental]

I recently talked a very close friend of mine off of a ledge. Take it how you may. This experience inspired me to write about how I felt on the matter. Perhaps a few of you can relate.

This is for every son gunned down fo he was ready to leave,
Or broken heart hangin heavy off the edge of a sleeve,
Ready to scream, fightin demons in the depths of a dream,
Shake me awake when the weight in me is shreddin the seams,
Threatenin me is the moment when my readiness leaves,
Cleavin me up the middle leavin me a mess to clean,
I'm blessed to be livin ready to fight a machine,
And reppin my team till whenever I'm ceasin to breathe,
Extendin my reach to whoever's in need of a preach,
In hopes to teach that suicide ain't all that it seems,
It's whack, exactly what it's cracked up to be,
A weakening and a way to flee from the way shit be,
The pain in me is the same you expect to see,
When you look in the mirror and say, " Hey, this isn't me.",
Peace isn't free out in the world where misery breeds,
Look past the picture and see truly what pain can mean,
A way to be better than you could ever claim to be,
Without a flaw what all could we expect to be,
Considering prosperity isn't a perfect scene,
But it's a step in the way the right direction leads,
Cause positivity is the blood that refreshment bleeds,
And depression caressin a soul is a deep ravine,
Death ain't a lesson, it's more like a blackened screen,
That cracks and bleeds when the gat claps and blasts ya deep.

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[Defiance]

yo this shit was fire dude, that whole heart on the sleave shit was so mindblowingly good, it actually surprised me. really good read.. it was everything youll find in a good piece.. it was intellectual, it flowed great, it had emotion, imagery, good rhymes.. good drop man

[MonuMental]

I appreciate that, bruh.

[Alvin]

I recently talked a very close friend of mine off of a ledge. Take it how you may. This experience inspired me to write about how I felt on the matter. Perhaps a few of you can relate.

This is for every son gunned down fo he was ready to leave,
Or broken heart hangin heavy off the edge of a sleeve,
Ready to scream, fightin demons in the depths of a dream,
Shake me awake when the weight in me is shreddin the seams,
Holy fucking shit man, this is a dope ass opener, it has everything needed.
Threatenin me is the moment when my readiness leaves,
Cleavin me up the middle leavin me a mess to clean,
I'm blessed to be livin ready to fight a machine,
And reppin my team till whenever I'm ceasin to breathe,
kinda took a more posotive twist, which is cool, but i would have waited for further down the piece to say im ready to help.
Extendin my reach to whoever's in need of a preach,
In hopes to teach that sucide ain't all that it seems,
It's whack, exactly what it's cracked up to be,
A weakening and a way to flea from the way shit be,
this last line was worded too simple for what you were trying to say, still dope, just something i read in ackwardness, like you couldnt find the more scenic route to say it.
The pain in me is the same you expect to see,
When you look in the mirror and say, " Hey, this isn't me.",
Peace isn't free out in the world where misery breeds,
Look past the picture and see truly what pain can mean,
this should connect with everyone some time in their life. Awesome man
A way to be better than you could ever claim to be,
without a flaw what all could we expect to be,
Considering prosperity isn't a perfect scene,
But it's a step in the way the right direction leads,
reads smoothly, good. Nothing expectacular, but fits well in the piece
Cause positivity is the blood that refreshment bleeds,
And depression caressin a soul is a deep ravine,
Death ain't a lesson, it's more like a blackened screen,
That cracks and bleeds when the gat claps and blasts ya deep.
dope ass closer man, all in all one of the best drops youve made this far. Record this shit man, stop playing and make this a hit.

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[MonuMental]

Panda, I appreciate the fuck outta that, bruh. On some real shit. I'm gonna take your advice on that recording tip. And thanks again.

[leeroi green]

very nice drop i like real emotion and ability to tell a story i'm on my way to check your others and kind of excited about that big ups

[MonuMental]

Appreciate it, bruh. Feed em if you want, alot of my shit got totally slept on.

[QwarterZ]

This was a nice piece man, very heart felt and real
something that goes missing in a lot of pieces these days
but you really brought this one to the table and wrote it sickly
very smooth and emotional, feeling sorry for your friend
keep writing my dude!