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this shit was dope man especailly the first verse.. good emotion, shit read like poetry tho, had good rhythm. was feeling the different range of emotion. the scared the happy.. good shit dog
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yo i was really feeling this. the message and everything. really dope :clap:
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Your vocabulary is impressive Cory, so no complaints there. The similies used are excellent. The concepts are original even if the topic isn't. So over all a very nice piece man. Did you mean to say "one again cupid" there at the end? Or is it "once"? One of my favorite parts because what your saying has been said, but your choice of words is what made it yours: "She a biology major, so the chemistry's impressive
She's cleverly inventive, her energy is endless
Intelligently imprinted, the memory's cemented
Although she's second guessing me w/ questions " dope piece man.

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great spin on a common topic and nice vocab..good use of multies and nice flow..this is solid bro...nice illiteration as well
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Re: Something That's Bugging Me

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Feeling this, dope flow nice words, good shit

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