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FatalX
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RUN for ya LIFE.this is the HEX of a BATTLE CRY//
FATAL X in the FLESH equals DEATH with an ALIBI//


Fuck the pretentious,and anybody with thier mouths full//
cause homie I got a hunger,that could turn me into southpaw//
I'm trying to live,thats why I do what I must//
and if that means killing you,understand time is up//
I will erupt,like 6 rounds quickly//
and rip into your chest until your found around 6 deep//
sound it out simply,theres a motive for my actions//
survival of the fittest,nah this is just a round of practice//
I'm an evil-twisted-sick-psychopathic//
the only thing Im good at,is how to turn a story tragic//
................a plot twist,Ill shift your adrenaline to climax//
in control of the situation,shit's been practically hijacked//
mind that,before you ever come head to toe//
because I'll play with ya head before I ever strip flesh from bone//
a hectic tone,is in the way I wreak havok//
where I roam is the shadows,filled with murderers and crack addicts//
I CHANNEL all my ENERGY,
while my SPIRIT is SOLEMN//
you HEAR my WORDS in the STREETS-->
because I'm SPEAKING in VOLUMES//

I'm like the MEDIA with QUESTIONS-I never stop SHOOTING
so IF you really got a PROBLEM-we can make this EXCLUSIVE...//
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Re: Intentions

Post by Duke »

Decent drop, but it started out better. I think you may have lost the flow about halfway in
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I felt this was kinda weak
I CHANNEL all my ENERGY,
while my SPIRIT is SOLEMN//
you HEAR my WORDS in the STREETS-->
because I'm SPEAKING in VOLUMES//

I'm like the MEDIA with QUESTIONS-I never stop SHOOTING
so IF you really got a PROBLEM-we can make this EXCLUSIVE...//
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Re: Intentions

Post by MonuMental »

i've definately seern better from you, bruh, but this isn't bad by any means. I think it could be spit with no problem, and I focus alot on the actual spitting part. Nice read.
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Re: Intentions

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RUN for ya LIFE.this is the HEX of a BATTLE CRY//
FATAL X in the FLESH equals DEATH with an ALIBI//
^^^dope start, flow was on point...
Fuck the pretentious,and anybody with thier mouths full//
cause homie I got a hunger,that could turn me into southpaw//
^^^okay line,...didnt really rhyme for me...
I'm trying to live,thats why I do what I must//
and if that means killing you,understand time is up//
^^^i like what you mean by this bar, but its basic...
I will erupt,like 6 rounds quickly//
and rip into your chest until your found around 6 deep//
^^^getting the feel of this verse being keystyle...
sound it out simply,theres a motive for my actions//
survival of the fittest,nah this is just a round of practice//
I'm an evil-twisted-sick-psychopathic//
the only thing Im good at,is how to turn a story tragic//
................a plot twist,Ill shift your adrenaline to climax//
in control of the situation,shit's been practically hijacked//
mind that,before you ever come head to toe//
because I'll play with ya head before I ever strip flesh from bone//
a hectic tone,is in the way I wreak havok//
where I roam is the shadows,filled with murderers and crack addicts//

- you started with your best line and dope flow but lost it as you got to the end. i did like this line too..."in control of the situation,shit's been practically hijacked//"...overall a good read. props though, cuz its hard for me to write or key shit up...
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Re: Intentions

Post by Defiance »

yeah i agree first part was illy than it started falling off, but enjoyed the read, was feeling the southpaw line
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good shit

keep um comming
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